Nowadays, with advancements of technology, most of the paper stuffs like as books and novels are disappeared, and people read the iBook’s in their cellphones. In my opinion, it has some advantages and disadvantages, so now I want to discuss about them.
First, in an era of progress, people don’t have time to waste on, and the time is valuable, so they are working hard to make comfortable life for themselves. For example, I lived in Australia for 13 years and since I emigrate to this country I was young, and I used to know about news by reading the newspaper but I study nursing on La-Torbe university and after I graduated I found a great job in Bondi life-guard in Sydney as a paramedical nurse, so I didn’t have any time to read the newspaper and I have to instead of that to social medias like as Instagram application. And it’s really better than the papers reading.
Second, in the past, because of using lots of paper stuffs, they must cut down lots of trees, and destroyed an animal’s life, and because of that, many popular of animals got decrease to 10 or 20 number in all the world. For example, in Amazon forest after cutting trees, because of that weather always been rainy, make the overflow like as huge flooded, and it was like the human killed that animals one by one. In 2013, my thesis was about, nearly 100 species of birds, in the Amazon basin, are at the highest recorded risk of extinction, according to a recent report by the International Union for Conservation of Nature (IUCN), which noted in its 2012 IUCN Red List of Threatened Species that the extent and pattern of deforestation across the Amazon was the primary reason behind the unfortunate development. Included in the list are already critically endangered species like the Rio Branco Ant bird and, according to conservationists, even a moderate rate of deforestation could affect the Rio Ant bird, which has potentially longer life spans. "Over one million Long-tailed Ducks have disappeared from the Baltic Sea over the last 20 years, resulting in the species being up listed to Vulnerable. The reasons for this decline are still not clear, but the outlook for another sea duck, Velvet Scoter is even worse, as the species is now listed as Endangered," the report stated. Another critically endangered Amazonian bird at greater risk of extinction from deforestation is the Hoary-throated Spine tail (kollari), which coul face the loss of about 80 percent of its habitat in about a decade, just like Africa's White-backed and Rappel’s Vultures, whose numbers are declining because of habitat loss.
In conclusion, every working to protecting animals is really important, and these doing has more benefit for people too. So I agree to will disappear the paper stuffs and libraries. I hope the examples I’ve given above have sufficiently expressed my opinion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1373, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
... the species is now listed as Endangered,' the report stated. Another critically ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, second, so, still, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2415.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9793814433 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9360231084 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562886597938 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.5403697 48.9658058833 226% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 161.0 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3333333333 20.6045352989 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0581185176001 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0267575073303 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0302428972662 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.055041007366 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403740551157 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 11.7677419355 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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