Some teenagers take part in different kinds of activities such as musical classes, sports classes and so on, but others only focus on one activity which is important to them. Which idea do you support?
Children are one of the important group of our community, therefore we should be meticulous about our decisions which we make for them, but should we let them attending sport, music and other similar classes? Responses to this question differ from one person to another according to the view that they are holding regarding the social issues. Personally speaking, I believe participating in many kinds of activities is more beneficial, and further justifications elaborate on my perspective.
Experiencing exciting moments and having fun is the first and the most significant advantage of attending music and sport classes; while, even critics cannot cast doubt on this point. Teenagers have more free time in comparison to adults, therefore they need to be involved with something when they have done their assignments. By participating in the favorite sport classes such as football or volleyball, children have opportunity to calm their anxiety and nerves about school, which is very helpful to refresh them to do their best in scientific class.
Another noteworthy aspect that should be addressed in this ongoing explanation is that teenagers will find a lot friends by joining music or sports groups and take advantages of them. As long as children are communicating with other teenagers they can improve their social skills in order to build close relationship. The more friends that a child makes, the more merits he/she can obtain from his/her friends. Perhaps some of these new friends are capable of assisting him/her in overcoming problems which he/she is facing for a long time. So, why should we deprive a child from a great source of finding useful friends? Sports, music and other terrific groups not only improve social skills in children, but also aid them to solve some problems.
Last but not least, all children have some potentially talents that themself are not aware of. There is a possibility that some children in a class can be a great musician or athlete in the future. However, if he cannot find a circumstance to demonstrate or improve his skills he would be discouraged. Provided that we oblige him to focus just on his lessons in the class I claim we are wasting human resources of our society
To sup up, with showing respect to the people who approve focusing in one activity I assert they are wrong because of underestimating mentioned points and attaching to one skill and activity neither beneficial in social concerns nor logical. Finally I suggest that all parents should allow attending sport and music classes for their children.
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Essay evaluation report by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rts groups and take advantages of them. As long as children are communicating with...
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Line 7, column 303, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[8]
Message: “Provided that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ove his skills he would be discouraged. Provided that we oblige him to focus just on his less...
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Line 9, column 243, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...eficial in social concerns nor logical. Finally I suggest that all parents should allow...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.222222222222 0.229887763892 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.178649237473 0.158761421928 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0893246187364 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0435729847495 0.046263068375 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0740740740741 0.0685040099705 108% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117647058824 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0588235294118 0.0351676179071 167% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.767656224 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0326797385621 0.0309702414327 106% => OK
Particles: 0.00217864923747 0.00188951952338 115% => OK
Determiners: 0.0718954248366 0.0887237588012 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0261437908497 0.0209618222197 125% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0152505446623 0.0139019557991 110% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2580.0 2387.08602151 108% => OK
No of words: 423.0 408.028673835 104% => OK
Chars per words: 6.09929078014 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.385342789598 0.338922669872 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.293144208038 0.251872472559 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.186761229314 0.174417080927 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127659574468 0.112833075102 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.767656224 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557919621749 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 65.6476724642 59.2087087015 111% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 24.8823529412 20.5533526081 121% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.0482222665 48.84282405 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.764705882 120.699889404 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8823529412 20.5533526081 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.647058823529 0.644075263715 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 54.196773745 45.7405998639 118% => OK
Elegance: 1.34558823529 1.45489161554 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315818493456 0.300154397459 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0869345277628 0.103427244359 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0692576464499 0.0752933317313 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.484246567745 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123973403992 0.151897553556 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104302739971 0.114077575197 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598475232254 0.0781384742642 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.259168133912 0.336927656856 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0642145960059 0.067059652881 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189985917188 0.210909579961 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425570370776 0.0618886996521 69% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rts groups and take advantages of them. As long as children are communicating with...
^^
Line 7, column 303, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[8]
Message: “Provided that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ove his skills he would be discouraged. Provided that we oblige him to focus just on his less...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 243, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...eficial in social concerns nor logical. Finally I suggest that all parents should allow...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.222222222222 0.229887763892 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.178649237473 0.158761421928 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0893246187364 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0435729847495 0.046263068375 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0740740740741 0.0685040099705 108% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117647058824 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0588235294118 0.0351676179071 167% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.767656224 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0326797385621 0.0309702414327 106% => OK
Particles: 0.00217864923747 0.00188951952338 115% => OK
Determiners: 0.0718954248366 0.0887237588012 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0261437908497 0.0209618222197 125% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0152505446623 0.0139019557991 110% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2580.0 2387.08602151 108% => OK
No of words: 423.0 408.028673835 104% => OK
Chars per words: 6.09929078014 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.385342789598 0.338922669872 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.293144208038 0.251872472559 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.186761229314 0.174417080927 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127659574468 0.112833075102 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.767656224 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557919621749 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 65.6476724642 59.2087087015 111% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 24.8823529412 20.5533526081 121% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.0482222665 48.84282405 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.764705882 120.699889404 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8823529412 20.5533526081 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.647058823529 0.644075263715 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 54.196773745 45.7405998639 118% => OK
Elegance: 1.34558823529 1.45489161554 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315818493456 0.300154397459 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0869345277628 0.103427244359 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0692576464499 0.0752933317313 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.484246567745 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123973403992 0.151897553556 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104302739971 0.114077575197 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598475232254 0.0781384742642 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.259168133912 0.336927656856 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0642145960059 0.067059652881 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189985917188 0.210909579961 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425570370776 0.0618886996521 69% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.