Responsibility and accountability are two things that every person should develop in his life that is what makes the individual and the country prosper. In this modern world it is common for the young adults to seek for freedom and also there are might be some who still prefers to live with their families. I am from India and here it is not common for young adults to live on their own but still in my opinion youth should be given independence from their parents as soon as they reach an appropriate age. There are quite a few reasons for that opinion of mine.
The first reason is the accountability when we are kids for every action we do good or bad our parents are held accountable like for instance in a class if a student misbehaves his parents will be called upon and will be made guilty for not controlling their kids actions. So when a young adult is living on his own he is responsible for every action of his and decision he makes and also will have to face the consequence of it. By learning from his mistakes it gives him a chance to develop and be a better person.
The other reason is responsibility as long as we are living with our parents they will take care of us like providing good food, clothes and checking on us everytime if we are doing something useful with our time or not. But once we are on our own he have to take care of everything right from cooking food, washing clothes and have to keep on track with our studies. Every decision that we make will have a direct impact on our future, so we are completely responsible for everything that might happen in future.
One can say it is safe for the young adults to live with their parents but parents will not always be there to protect their child from every possible harm. So, the child has to learn on his own to protect himself from danger where giving independence from their parents is a good start to it. So, as said I feel young adults should be given independence from their parents as soon as they reach appropriate age and when parents think their child is wise enough to live on his own.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...e or not. But once we are on our own he have to take care of everything right from c...
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Line 3, column 504, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...nsible for everything that might happen in future. One can say it is safe for the young...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, as to, for instance, i feel, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.35989717224 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40565327441 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437017994859 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.6266294776 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.461538462 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9230769231 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325019249589 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134334120108 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103366813682 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214708068533 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100184607039 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.6 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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