The essential question of the prompt is whether it is beneficial for the students to live with their families or live independently. Certainly, some students, if asked, would say that living alon offeres many advantages like freedom and exploring new live. Others would say that living with their families is less distracting. In my views, the later opinion is more convincing. The basis of my views is as the follow.
Families can be a great financial support for their childrens. Childrens who live with their families are less financially stressed than who lives independently. Given that, tuition fees, live expenses and car insurance are very costly, students could face tremendous challenges to support their life's. For example, Study conducted by The University of California indicated that students who are live independently are more distracted from their studies than who are live with their parents. For example, they have to manage their work schedual to fit their classes time. In addition, they have to spend more time working to cover their expenses rather than studying. In contrast, living with their families give the students a great opportunity to focus solely on their studies.
In addition, students can get the emotional support they need from their parents. Since students need a quite place to study, they are porn for a massive distraction if they share room with a roomate. In contrast, parents can offer a quite room for their children to focuse on their studies. Given that parents can prepare food and drinks for their children, children can utilize their time more effectively and efficiently. If students live alone, they have to deal with some negative
consequences like noisy roomate, finding time to prepare food and drinks. ultimately,they receive lower final score results simply because of all the distraction surrounding. By getting help from their parents, students can easily reach their ultimate goals.
As a conclusion, we can safely say that even thought that independent live have some advantages, living with their parents carries significant advantages than living independently. Because parents save no efforts to help their childrens either financially or emotionally, students should live with their parents particularly during university time.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In contrast, parents can offer a quite room for their children to focuse on their studies.
Description: A qualifier, pre is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to quite and room
Sentence: Certainly, some students, if asked, would say that living alon offeres many advantages like freedom and exploring new live.
Error: alon Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: offeres Suggestion: offers
Sentence: Families can be a great financial support for their childrens.
Error: childrens Suggestion: children
Sentence: For example, they have to manage their work schedual to fit their classes time.
Error: schedual Suggestion: schedule
Sentence: Since students need a quite place to study, they are porn for a massive distraction if they share room with a roomate.
Error: porn Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: roomate Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In contrast, parents can offer a quite room for their children to focuse on their studies.
Error: focuse Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: If students live alone, they have to deal with some negative consequences like noisy roomate, finding time to prepare food and drinks. ultimately,they receive lower final score results simply because of all the distraction surrounding.
Error: roomate Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Because parents save no efforts to help their childrens either financially or emotionally, students should live with their parents particularly during university time.
Error: childrens Suggestion: children
flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1890 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.235 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.619 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.787 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 407, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...convincing. The basis of my views is as the follow. Families can be a great financial ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ty to focus solely on their studies. In addition, students can get the emotiona...
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Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('quite') instead an adjective, or a noun ('place') instead of another adjective.
...from their parents. Since students need a quite place to study, they are porn for a massive d...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 233, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('quite') instead an adjective, or a noun ('room') instead of another adjective.
...roomate. In contrast, parents can offer a quite room for their children to focuse on their s...
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Line 6, column 75, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Ultimately
...inding time to prepare food and drinks. ultimately,they receive lower final score results ...
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Line 6, column 85, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...e to prepare food and drinks. ultimately,they receive lower final score results simpl...
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Line 6, column 131, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...receive lower final score results simply because of all the distraction surroundi...
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Discourse Markers used:
['if', 'so', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235148514851 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.168316831683 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0717821782178 0.0866891130778 83% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0594059405941 0.046263068375 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0816831683168 0.0685040099705 119% => OK
Prepositions: 0.136138613861 0.118717715034 115% => OK
Participles: 0.0445544554455 0.0351676179071 127% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.77868873952 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.029702970297 0.0309702414327 96% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0519801980198 0.0887237588012 59% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0272277227723 0.0209618222197 130% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00990099009901 0.0139019557991 71% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2304.0 2387.08602151 97% => OK
No of words: 360.0 408.028673835 88% => OK
Chars per words: 6.4 5.86048508987 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.380555555556 0.338922669872 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.313888888889 0.251872472559 125% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.225 0.174417080927 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.136111111111 0.112833075102 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77868873952 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497222222222 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 52.4734388004 59.2087087015 89% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.1428571429 20.5533526081 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5822287708 48.84282405 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.714285714 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 20.5533526081 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.285714285714 0.644075263715 44% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 48.5317460317 45.7405998639 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.344 1.45489161554 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305876539632 0.300154397459 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.152433080462 0.103427244359 147% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.106547291591 0.0752933317313 142% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.503467347521 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0960937574861 0.151897553556 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119445010488 0.114077575197 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473973829554 0.0781384742642 61% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.305573837002 0.336927656856 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.107929794214 0.067059652881 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195554992388 0.210909579961 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392410079993 0.0618886996521 63% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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