In an era of progress, and temporary decades’ human’s life has changed a lot and the most interesting stuff is airplane. That’s solved people problem to send and sell their products to another countries and also each person can travel somewhere like, without any problems such as dangerous ways or animal’s attacks, so it’s a quiet welfare for people and their family. Actually students can go around a world to find favorite jobs or favorite field to study and live there. In my opinion, airplane has had more useful and more important changing in humanity life than bicycles and automobiles.
First, in the past the first thing that scientist invented was, basic automobiles but the problem was the cast of that was too much expensive and just royal families had it, but after somehow, international factories designed kinds of cheaper cars and develop it and send it to other countries, that was a huge part of developing industrial but not the big one. My grandfather always tells me a story about his experienced when he buys an automobile in Tehran the capital city of Iran and because of his generous he gave it to my grandmother as a gift, because of that they got married.
Second, bicycles are always cheaper than other transportation, but it depends on which country you live, because in Iran and India they don’t have any bicycles line so it’s dangerous in these countries, in addition, most of the bicycles owner had die in accidents. Therefore, the owners should pedal lots of hours to arrive their destination, on the other hand, it’s like as exercise and good for health. I remember I fell down from my pink bicycle when I was 8 and my shoulder had broken after that I always afraid to ride it.
In conclusion, airplane had change all human’s life also it’s a great way to connecting of other cultures and countries. Although progress of technology is helpful to this changing. Nowadays it’s a normal way to go abroad with kind of airlines brands.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 29, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'changed'.
Suggestion: changed
...ride it. In conclusion, airplane had change all human's life also it's a ...
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Line 7, column 132, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ecting of other cultures and countries. Although progress of technology is helpful to th...
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Line 7, column 268, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...go abroad with kind of airlines brands.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, as to, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95307917889 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83016879998 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604105571848 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.0444963262 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.75 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4166666667 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6666666667 5.45110844103 214% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124621060609 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470429682848 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045216236994 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0781040474638 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500578981314 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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