Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is the best way for teachers to help students become more interested in a subject by explaining how this subject can help students live better outside the school.
In the modern era, schools play a prominent role in each individual's success. Having a solid academic background can have great impact in many aspects of life. Since the technology is being developed at a galloping rate, even basic courses are becoming more demanding. The controversial question which arises here is whether teachers can make their students interested in challenging courses by showing these courses affect their daily life. As far as I am concerned, this approach can be beneficial in numerous ways. In what follows, two elaborate reasons will vindicate my standpoint.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that although many courses might have rudimentary concepts, these ideas are fundamental and helpful in various aspects of life. There are different technological breakthroughs that rely on simple concepts and if the teacher thrives to explain these topics to the students, they will be highly motivated to make their best effort in order to pass these demanding courses. Moreover, a lot of students get discouraged from challenging courses like mathematics because they surmise these courses are not helpful for their future vocation. However, teachers can correct this misunderstanding. Furthermore, there are state-of-the-art teaching implements that can assist teachers in order to obtain this goal. Teachers can ask their students to write a brief paper about a certain technology and its relationship with their lessons. Another helpful approach is to take students to scientific trips and show them that their courses are an indispensable part of sophisticated science. For instance, when I was at high school most of the students were not interested in calculus course because they thought it is useless in real life. Our teacher dedicated two complete session to watching different videos which indicated that significance of this course in facilitating daily life with inventing new devices. For instance, he explained how a certain function in modern mobile network was enhance by elementary concepts we all had learned that semester. Had our teacher not employed this genuine approach, we would have refused to put more effort in that course.
The second noteworthy reason is that not only can this approach have short-term effects, it can give durable incentive to many students. By introducing various useful concepts of courses to students, teacher can help their students to find their favorite vocation in the future. As many different aspects of modern technology is discussed in the class by this approach, students will be able to cultivate their knowledge about different fields. In consequence, they can come with an elaborate plan about their future and decide wisely. Recent statistics reveal that a wide majority of university students assert that they would have chosen another major if they had been informed about other fields. To make a long story short, the mentioned approach can dramatically change students' future and help them flourish.
To bring everything into conclusion, it is more than essential that teachers embark in this strategy. The mentioned tactic can be advantageous because it will help students to get along with demanding courses by knowing their importance in modern technology. Also, this approach can change students' future since it provides them with profound knowledge about different vocations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
..., schools play a prominent role in each individuals success. Having a solid academic backgr...
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Line 3, column 1202, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'session' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'sessions'.
Suggestion: sessions
...ife. Our teacher dedicated two complete session to watching different videos which indi...
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Line 3, column 1422, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'enhanced'.
Suggestion: enhanced
...n function in modern mobile network was enhance by elementary concepts we all had learn...
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Line 5, column 283, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...eir favorite vocation in the future. As many different aspects of modern technology is discuss...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, for instance, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2862.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41020793951 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85142493779 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510396975425 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 874.8 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6407039428 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.076923077 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3461538462 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.23076923077 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25116049986 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768020771154 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362806699227 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173619587382 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438973332145 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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