students should learn several things from schools , colleges , or their universities . so , learning the most of their knowledge happen in the universities because of this fact . government should spend a lot of money to prepare these facilities .
there are different ways for educating students in colleges , scientists and psychologists say people need to improve themselves in many aspects . because people have a lot of problems and their minds are so busy .so , they can't focus on their difficulties and it causes bother them and other people. also , doing several activities cause be relax and happier than before. n addition to , students will have more self confidence then they can more concentrate on their lessons . for example , a few years ago a group of psychologists chose different students of a college and divided them to two groups ; one group didn't have extra activity and they just studied but the other group had extra time for doing sports and fun . after six months the researchers found out the second group had better ranks and they felt better about themselves , moreover , they enthusiasted to do the other extra work .
the other positive point of spending money on social activities are about to know more about their abilities . because the most of students don't know about their skills until involve them . in addition to , some students don't believe themselves for exercising specific sport . for instance , one of my friends loved to play volleyball but he didn't try at all . one day one of his friends injured during exercise and he took part instead of him in that competition . after the game , coach said that you are really good player and i'm glad to have you in my team . after this experience he tried to be one of the best players and some years later he invited to national team . if the college didn't spend money on extra activities he wouldn't be a good player .
finally , its better to pay money for doing extra activities such as social , sport and the others because people need a relax mind to have the best society . so , I agree with this statement .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, moreover, really, second, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87005649718 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57466873986 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531073446328 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6829347716 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7368421053 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6315789474 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 66.0 5.5376344086 1192% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102782150868 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379141642754 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378052000255 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0788604357437 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388089513193 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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