There is no doubt that friendship is a great relationship because it has all the meanings of honest, loyalty, reliability and love. Personally, I semi-agree with the statement and I see that is important to keep the old friendship strong and make a new friendship at the same time. Someone could weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
First, we meet a lot of people in every life stage and we should have a good relation with them. For example, after I have got my master degree, I worked at big hospital. My first week there was very boring but after that I have met a kind workmate her name was Asmaa. Me and Asmaa were became a close friends. We used to work together and helped each other in the work. At one day, my mam get tired and I was supposed to take care of her, but I was having a lot of work at the hospital. In order to that, I called Asmaa and told her that I have a big problem and all the work should be done today. I was very lucky when Asmaa Told me do not worry I will do all the work.
Second, we should keep in touch with your old friends and force your relationship because they are the real friends. For example, when I was child, I joined the primary school. At the first day I was feeling very frightened and bothered. But when I entered the classroom, I was found a kind girl sharing me the seat and her name was Mariam. Mariam became my real friend and still now my close even after 20 years. Mariam had proved to me all the meaning of loyalty and honesty. For instance, when I was supposed to be quit from my department, she earned me the required money. In addition to that, when my dad was required an expensive surgery and we were in a bad situation, she went to the hospital management and paid the bill.
From the aforementioned reasons, I see that is very necessary and more profitable to the person to keep all his old and new friendships.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...e her name was Asmaa. Me and Asmaa were became a close friends. We used to work togeth...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 673, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me do not worry I will do all the work. Second, we should keep in touch with you...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, still, for example, for instance, in addition, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.25136612022 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43394627689 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6285111844 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0952380952 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4285714286 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95238095238 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104995337329 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0324515210858 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661451393541 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0811133125768 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367192815971 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.07 10.9000537634 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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