The school is the center for knowledge where we can learn new things that help students to address the real world. we all attend the school to learn lessons to survive in the real world. Although it is not ideal, no two students have follow the same strategy in their schooling. some students believe that preceptive of concept and the approach is important. And others not. As per as my concern, I don't believe that the understand ideas and the concept are the priority in learning compared to learning the facts because to survive in the real world and to get the better position in the life.
First and for most, the learning facts at school help students to face the consequences in the real world. When we are studying the school, we had a fantasy about life because we don't know the real life. Once we look out from the school campus. the real life is too fast and more competitive. If we learn the facts about the real world at the school, it is easy to survive in the competitive world. My own experience compelling the example of this, when I was studying high school, I had a dream to become a doctor because my friends always misguided me that, it is easy to become a doctor. But I don't know the fact that, to study medicine we need a lot of financial support. Once I completed my high school, I enquired about the procedure for applying to medical school, they explained that it is difficult to get admission to medical school since u have strong knowledge, as a result, i face difficult to survive in the other profession. This example revealed the importance of learning facts.
Second, in addition, to survive in the real world learning facts help to reach high positions at work. As we all know, once we completed our studies, we need a job to settle in the life. If we know the reality, when we are studying, it is easy to get the better job because we already know the fact about the outside environment. What more, we will get the nice job in a short period of time and get experience within a short period. so, we could have the chance to get high positions in a short period of time. however I don't think so, it is possible with learning the only subject in classrooms. For example, my friend Alex, a gold medalist at university but now he doesn't have the proper job because he never concentrates on the facts.
In conclusion, I feel that learning facts at school help students to understand the life better and also to keep students in the good position in the carrier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46389496718 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48361657606 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.413566739606 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4382996157 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6956521739 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8695652174 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73913043478 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115083361705 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453240531136 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455471742566 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.089042287429 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348383263732 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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