There are certain considerations or factors that everyone can take into account to investigate and examine the impact of advertisements on young children. I certainly agree that television advertising directed toward children should be forbidden. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
Firstly, television advertising can waste parents’ money. These days, because of the world economical criticism, all parents have to work hard to make money for clothes, foods, and other things that are essential for a family. In this circumstance, parents have to save their money and prevent from any unwanted wasting. Most of the advertisers now use an excellent visual and audio effect to offer persuasive programs, and so attract children to purchase their products. Because of this, children should force their parents to devote money and buy something new, and so budget limitation can be one of the prominent and crucial consequences.
Furthermore, avoiding from physical and psychological difficulties is another noticeable reason. All parents perfectly understand that the ages of two to five are very critical for children to grow and become a healthy adult. Based on a research, which has been carried out by Society Department of Utah University in 2016, more than 60% of the advertisements directed toward children are oriented for candy and junk food. This food can be the origin of several thorny problems such as overweight, malnutrition, and hypertension. Therefore, it is crystal clear that impeding mentioned advertisements would be necessary to hinder those sophisticated and problematic issues.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that these advertisements inform customers about the last and useful products that companies and factories offer for children, so the parents can provide children those stuffs. However, still I affirm that advertisements aimed for children should not be permitted. Although advertisements have some profits, these advantages can be neglected. Plus, advertisers try to show the positive points of a merchandise and hidden the negative points, and thus they are not trustable and can be a real and serious thread for children.
Due to aforementioned ground, all folk should bear in mind that television advertising is not beneficial for children. Participation of learning and healthiness are two prime and conspicuous supports.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Plus, advertisers try to show the positive points of a merchandise and hidden the negative points, and thus they are not trustable and can be a real and serious thread for children.
Error: trustable Suggestion: No alternate word
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 2024 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.397 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.087 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.893 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.45 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.521 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 586, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a real and serious thread for children. Due to aforementioned ground, all folk s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.576 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1922639824 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597333333333 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9376088956 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.55 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195016313211 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666230242041 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682697981832 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121938912982 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389991576394 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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