"Technology has made a big impact in our society collaborated with social media that influences children ".
I personally, agree that technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Moreover, the technology with this generation nowadays had made a lot of changes that I will tackle with my reasons and cast doubt on the advantages of the technology.
It may disagreeable to some people due to the high impact of the technology in our current generation. Technology has dominated the world with the strong influence of social media to children. That one of the disadvantage is that, it become a wrong habit to some children.
To begin with, the effect of the technology with some children has negative impact to them in different aspect. In some reason, children will be less likely interested on using the library to make a research or project, that eventually they will become lazy and not able to use books and journals in which using books and journal helps on aiding the student to be more resources. For example, in my own personal experience, when I was studying in college I normally, go to the library to make a research on a certain topic, wherein, I was able to complete my research with the help of books and medical journal.
As a student, it is important to make a habit to go to the library in that way, students can gain a lot of information from the books that gives more ideas and insights. Books can be consider a best tool for learning skills and gaining more knowledge. n that way, children will become more resourceful.However, some people will argue on that due to the technology in this generation dominated the society, somehow can help by purchasing a app on the computers, that is more educational and can get information ,as well.
On my view, children has the tendency to just depend on the technology that makes them more unreliable and unable to take relevant information when they only base on the technology giving a example is that, I have a friend that has a daughter whenever she has a homework, she always rely on the information given on the computer app an that app has given them wrong information that makes her homework incomplete.
On the contrary, computer apps has somehow, beneficial to some children that it can utilize on educational games that in variable situation. But, children has to learn how to limit the usage of computers, that eventually gives them harmful effect.
Parents plays the significant role and it is necessary that makes them obligated and responsible to guide their children when in terms of using the technology.
In my conclusion, the beneficial of using the library is to gaining more reliable information, thus, gives a relevant insights to children that make them more creative and able to learn more skills, However, nowadays, it may also help children with the technology with the utilization of using apps on the computer that sell educational materials to children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...hat one of the disadvantage is that, it become a wrong habit to some children. To b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, as to, for example, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2441.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87225548902 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89739930444 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425149700599 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 781.2 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.9246681339 48.9658058833 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 143.588235294 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4705882353 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201558878452 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831311993879 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0960683388285 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133905816991 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800199465119 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.