There are different views on children playing computer games. Some argue that playing or spending time on computers games is waste of time. While others argue that it may give pleasure and happiness to children. In my opinion, playing computer games all the time may be wasting time, because children may get health problems by sitting all the time on the computers, at the same time their communication skills may be degraded.
To begin with, one disadvantage of playing computer games is health problems may occur due to continuously sitting in the same place. Children who play games on the computer may easily be affected by some diseases like obesity. Furthermore, they can't be fit and active when compared to the children who play outdoor games. For instance, my cousin brother was habituated to play games on the computer all the time, gradually he increased the weight and slowly he got severe health issues. He is not active compared to other kids. To be specific, physical exercise is more helpful for good health and can be happy rather than sitting in one place and playing games.
Secondly, children may not be able to interact and communicate with others if they spend time playing computer games. Communication is very important to share ideas and convey the information. If this was not developed in children from childhood they would feel lonely and unhappy at a certain time. Moreover, children who dont spend all the time on computer games can convey the information to others easily, at the same time his interaction with people might be easy. For instance, I have seen the kids of my cousin's who play computer games and who dont play computer games, I observed that the kid who is not playing computer games is more active and speaking to others more freely. Therefore, children should spend time on other activities, so that their communication skills can be increased.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that children spending time on computer games would be waste of time because they can't properly interact with others and can't stay healthy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96551724138 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57995412705 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448275862069 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5825578209 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.647058824 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58823529412 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288720947525 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121652607971 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689754684528 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211502703666 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317909115173 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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