One of the significant changes that happened in the 20th century and up till now is people immigration to different countries and that change had an impact on their culture. For example some people used to think that extended family is very important in their life due to caring and intemacy between family members. while I believe it can not be generelized to all cases, I tend to disagree on such a view for the following concerns.
First, Economy had an impact on our relationship with the extended family. Back in the days before introducing technology in many aspects of life, economy depended more on humans. That explains why the extended family had to live beside each other and work in agriculture or any other project. It was common to have one project for the whole family. In contrast, Today technology has been introduced in everything such as agriculture, industry and medicine. For example, in agriculture there are machines now that can be used so there is no need to have 30 or 40 people to plant, only few people are needed to operate and supervise the machines. In addition, today due to population growth, there is high competition in almost all the fields, this competition encouraged people to immigrate to a different place looking for more money or a better position, which lead small families to be a part.
Second, Before the wife used to go to work and leave her children with the grand parents or the cousins. Also, the extended family used to help in the house work. But today that has been changed, With the technology and the internet the wife can hire someone to take care of the children or even send them to a day care where they can learn different skills. About the house work, It is getting easier every day, For example, now there is a vacum that can clean the house by itself without any human intervention. In the past also, the extended family used to help in the education process which is easier nowadays with the internet, the student can search any information without asking other members of the family.
Third, I think it is important to live far from the extended family to maintain some privacy for the small family. In the past, the whole big family used to gather for dinner every night and hear about everyone's problems and they usually interfere out of love which can be distracting for that person. I think to take a good decision, the person need to have some time to think and only share his or her concern with the close family members.
In conclusion, The extended family are special to us due to their caring and the good time we spend together. However, Today with the hard economy and technology that makes our life easier, I agree that being far from the extended family is more important to have a healthy life style with the small family.
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Essay evaluation report
is people immigration to different countries
is people's immigration to different countries
there is high competition
there is a high competition
The extended family are special
The extended family is special
Sentence: For example some people used to think that extended family is very important in their life due to caring and intemacy between family members. while I believe it can not be generelized to all cases, I tend to disagree on such a view for the following concerns.
Error: generelized Suggestion: generalized
Error: intemacy Suggestion: intimacy
Sentence: About the house work, It is getting easier every day, For example, now there is a vacum that can clean the house by itself without any human intervention.
Error: vacum Suggestion: vacuum
flaws:
No. of Words: 497 while No. of Different Words: 228
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 497 350
No. of Characters: 2258 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.722 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.543 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.372 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.554 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 318, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...ng and intemacy between family members. while I believe it can not be generelized to ...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ut asking other members of the family. Third, I think it is important to live ...
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'while', 'for example', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238007380074 0.229887763892 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.153136531365 0.158761421928 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0848708487085 0.0866891130778 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0424354243542 0.046263068375 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0424354243542 0.0685040099705 62% => OK
Prepositions: 0.105166051661 0.118717715034 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0332103321033 0.0351676179071 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.4575337731 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0535055350554 0.0309702414327 173% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.112546125461 0.0887237588012 127% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0129151291513 0.0209618222197 62% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0166051660517 0.0139019557991 119% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2820.0 2387.08602151 118% => OK
No of words: 497.0 408.028673835 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67404426559 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.303822937626 0.338922669872 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.225352112676 0.251872472559 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.150905432596 0.174417080927 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0885311871227 0.112833075102 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4575337731 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46277665996 0.524397521467 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.0711072362 59.2087087015 90% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.85 20.5533526081 121% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.613249268 48.84282405 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.0 120.699889404 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.85 20.5533526081 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.644075263715 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 47.3852112676 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.58139534884 1.45489161554 109% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421819808364 0.300154397459 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.126051518967 0.103427244359 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0642061606252 0.0752933317313 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.584953648572 0.497263757937 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.151785151027 0.151897553556 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194319166665 0.114077575197 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634351190931 0.0781384742642 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.490321746779 0.336927656856 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0220207529165 0.067059652881 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312340344874 0.210909579961 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377478667135 0.0618886996521 61% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.