The family is one of the first groups that when an individual was born in the respective household, spontaneously becomes a member of it. A family is not confined in parents and their children, in fact it consists of parents of parents, parents' siblings, parents' siblings' children as cousins, and the list goes on with further relatives. Therefore, the word 'family' is converted to 'extended family'. Some people agree that the extended family is less important now than it was in the past, others disagree. Even though The extended family is beneficiary for people in their childhood because children play with their relatives as they are their first friends and playmates, in my view, nowadays it is less important than the past because of two important reasons.
First, youngsters of current era prefer to live on their own rather than spend time with the expanded family. Due to the contemporary living trends, people are not depending on each other compared to the past. Priorities in life change because the lifestyle alters progressively. For instance, one of the most significant factors that impacts young adults lifestyle is social network emergence. every person in a social network has many friends, which are not obligatory friends or family but friends who are chosen by themselves. People prefer to choose their friends and have the right to choose. This right and the permission to it has a direct effect on connection with family, which makes it less slight.
Second, unfortunately, no one should trust his/her family members like the past. Today, everybody becomes more sinister because of personally economic issues or the destructive desire to be ostentatious and pretentious. They may even defraud their own relatives for more benefit in return. For example, I remember my uncle who was trusted by his relatives. Someday he came up with an idea about investing in a company which provided goods. He deceived his brothers and sisters, which one of them is my father, to buy shares from this industrial corporation. When he succeeded in luring them to invest, he got the money from them which was an enormous quantity. He suddenly disappeared, He did not answer his phone, and no one had an idea where he was. Even we were worried that he might have had an accident or something. Later, we found out that our beloved uncle was a fraud, and he stole all the money and exited the country for his own sake. He destroyed all the faithfulness and loyalty that he gained in all these years by doing something vicious. This event learned me that even you share the same blood with your family members, they may be sinister and take advantage of you. Thus, trusting a friend may be better because you do not expect from a friend to be staunch.
Therefore, in this era, people are not reliable on the extended family and its members. They prefer to rely on their own.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'of parents'.
Suggestion: of parents
...and their children, in fact it consists of parents of parents, parents siblings, parents siblings chi...
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Line 1, column 358, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h further relatives. Therefore, the word family is converted to extended family. ...
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Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... the contemporary living trends, people are not depending on each other compared to the past. Pri...
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Line 3, column 350, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
... significant factors that impacts young adults lifestyle is social network emergence. ...
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Line 3, column 396, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Every
... lifestyle is social network emergence. every person in a social network has many fri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in fact, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2393.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87372708758 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61938848389 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515274949084 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8197141996 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6296296296 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1851851852 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170558472395 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466416599263 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602326823471 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100800785989 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646304584371 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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