I, personally, strongly agree that the extended family is becoming uncommon. After the industrial revolution, human beings' lifestyle has changed significantly and altered many aspects of life as well families structures. Moreover, nowadays, people have a different attitude, interests, desires and so forth which diable to have a close tie with their relatives. And the last but not least, a relationship, in general, have declined among folks, so it affects relations in families too.
First, after the so-called industrial revolution, people migrated from rural areas to urban zones. They used to live on by working in fields, and also they were small communities with a limited amount of inhabitant. They faced with abundant difficulties, and they could not conquer hardships unless they supported each other. Thus, we get to the point that how much-extended family was vital for ancient people to survive. But, by migration to cities, people became more independent and they we did not obligate to keep a close relationship with others as well as their family. That is why I think the humans' progress during history has changed the shape of families.
Second of all, today, people have a variety of options to make their future. For example, a group of people may want to be a professional athlete, whereas others are interested in participating in university and get a degree. Besides, we tend to make relationships with people who have the same concerns. Hence, one searches for a person with a specific quality. It is evident that having more in common with a friend gets a higher priority than trying to merely communicate with your relatives, particularly when they do not understand you!
Ultimately, I assume that people appreciate solitude in comparison to the past. For example, I prefer to stay at home and study my favorite books rather than interact with my cousins. It does not mean that I am selfish. However, I realize that many of my friends have the same feeling as mine.
For all the reasons that I have stated, I presume, not only has extended family decayed, but also people even have no desire to start a friendship to one another! our society has been changing rapidly, and people comprehend life differently. Therefore, the old kinds of relationship certainly have no more practical results and should be substituted with new forms.
- TOEFL TPO 14 - Integrated Writing Task 88
- tpo 26 Integrated task 80
- TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you 83
- TPO 5 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do 7
- TPO-13 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 81
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
... After the industrial revolution, human beings lifestyle has changed significantly and...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it affects relations in families too. First, after the so-called industrial re...
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Line 9, column 164, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Our
...e to start a friendship to one another! our society has been changing rapidly, and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, as to, for example, i think, in general, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08717948718 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84350072691 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594871794872 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3129818736 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12441001705 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373860785354 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378483177004 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0688561890497 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0138115347309 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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