Family especially the extended family is very important for us as human beings. Some might think that it is have no importance for them what will happen to the family. Others op to this idea and assume that family is introduced to them as a person. This is due to the fact that they see how the family could help when you need help.
First of all, family is the principal family consist of mother and father and sibling or siblings. They have their own life but they are always there for you. They will help you when it is needed. For instance my brother is always helping me and as a proverb we have in our country; the brother is for hard your day.
Moreover, extended family consist of uncles and aunts can be helpful but they do not care as much as the principal family. In some religions and cultures they can help economically one each other. They help for tuition of university and college of each other. If one of them is rich or all of them together help that poor kid of their family, due to the fact that something is crucial for that kid and will change his future.
Furthermore, for us as Iranians we should help each other because our ancestor is the same any way. We should help each other in case of difficult times such as flood and earthquake, and it is what human's instinct will tell him if such distastes happen.
In summary, considering what I have discussed above, it is apparent that I believe that support of the family outweigh its absence.
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Essay evaluation report
Some might think that it is have no importance for them
Some might think that it has no importance for them
family is the principal family consist of mother and father
family is the principal family which consists of mother and father
family is the principal family consisting of mother and father
extended family consist of uncles and aunts can be helpful
extended family which consists of uncles and aunts can be helpful
extended family consisting of uncles and aunts can be helpful
flaws:
The essay is not exactly right on the topic. Need to compare the importance between the past and nowadays
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 272 350
No. of Characters: 1168 1500
No. of Different Words: 142 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.061 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.294 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.203 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 73 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 46 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.712 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.594 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.198 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...man beings. Some might think that it is have no importance for them what will happen...
^^^^
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Others op to this idea and assume that family is introduced to them as a person...
^^
Line 9, column 123, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that support of the family outweigh its absence.
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'for instance', 'in summary', 'such as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.179661016949 0.229887763892 78% => OK
Verbs: 0.15593220339 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0847457627119 0.0866891130778 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0440677966102 0.046263068375 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.118644067797 0.0685040099705 173% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.128813559322 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0169491525424 0.0351676179071 48% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.27982681231 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0169491525424 0.0309702414327 55% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0847457627119 0.0887237588012 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0338983050847 0.0209618222197 162% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0203389830508 0.0139019557991 146% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1475.0 2387.08602151 62% => OK
No of words: 272.0 408.028673835 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42279411765 5.86048508987 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.48200974243 91% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.279411764706 0.338922669872 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.194852941176 0.251872472559 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.113970588235 0.174417080927 65% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0661764705882 0.112833075102 59% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27982681231 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518382352941 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 50.5791418116 59.2087087015 85% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 18.1333333333 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4650547657 48.84282405 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 120.699889404 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.644075263715 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 37.618627451 45.7405998639 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.02127659574 1.45489161554 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276097594406 0.300154397459 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.142242777893 0.103427244359 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0804213830029 0.0752933317313 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.591404949306 0.497263757937 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153802202781 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121355098318 0.114077575197 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054966139738 0.0781384742642 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.280356195812 0.336927656856 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.108316240543 0.067059652881 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180218728683 0.210909579961 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500470581571 0.0618886996521 81% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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