TPO-13 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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TPO-13 - Independent Writing Task

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Family is integral part of society, its molds the personality, attitude and social skills of their children. There is no shortage of debate whether extended family is less important today than it was in the past. In my opinion, I don't agree that it is less important to have extended family in this generation, thus, strong family ties have advantageous effects on each family member. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, Strong family ties are important aspects in growing up. In addition, growing up in an extended family provides each childhood more memorable, In a sense, that good values and conduct will be taught to you by your uncle, grandparents or aunts. Moreover, relatives will guide you in every decisions and difficulties in life you stumble upon. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My grandparents live with us, since I was born she was at my side molding me to become a good individual, thus, her patience with me paid off I become good citizen through her guidance and nourishment. For this reason, I believe it is important to have strong family ties, due, to relatives can guide you to become a better person.

Secondly, extended family serves as your emotional blanket, hence, they are always there to support in times of emotional and financial problem. Moreover, relatives are easy to reach in case of emergency, so, when situation comes they will be there immediately. For instance, there was fire in our subdivision, my uncle rapidly called our home to tell us that the fire was couple of blocks from our house, without my uncle quick thinking and help our home could been engulfed with flames. My uncle helped us to get important documents and clothes to bring at my sister's house, luckily we survived and no one get hurt. Accordingly, I think it is essential to have extended family because family would always be there for you in times of need.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is beneficial to to have extended family in this generation. This is because living with relatives will help you to become better people, they will guide you to be on the right path and always there for the family in times of difficult situation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...an it was in the past. In my opinion, I dont agree that it is less important to have...
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Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have been' or 'be'?
Suggestion: have been; be
... quick thinking and help our home could been engulfed with flames. My uncle helped u...
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Line 7, column 57, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
... strongly believe that it is beneficial to to have extended family in this generation...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78406169666 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62835588106 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506426735219 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.352393128 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.470588235 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8823529412 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11764705882 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240465124557 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796026723096 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513867849911 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149610974796 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368213152816 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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