Traveling is not only for relax but also for learning and interaction with new different people. Does travel in your own country offer greater advantages than travel aboard? There is a controversy among different people whether people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. I disagree with the statement mainly for learning new idea and experience and many destination choices in foreign countries.
To begin with, while some people travel for relax or amusement, many people travel to gain new experience and expand their views. Travel offers new experience such as climate and ancient construction you never seen before. If destination were limited only within the country you were born, you would only experience similar people, places and cultures. As a result, experience aboard can offers benefit that cannot found within your own country. To illustrate, you can take an example of local business of process fruits. Several years ago, the owner only produced and sold fruits in his local area. However, after he learned from his experience abroad that fruits could be processed so that they can be stored for more than a month. Currently, he is the pioneered in processed fruits business and one of the biggest exporter of processed food in South East Asia.
Furthermore, traveling in other countries offers varieties choices of destination. Destination such as high mountains, beaches or ski resorts are only can find within some countries. While some people from cold climate want to go to beaches for holidays, others from hot climate want to experience snow. As a result, traveling in your own country would have limited choices of destination. For instance, my friend Darren who was an exchange student from Europe, describe Thailand’s beaches as heaven on earth, since beached in his country are not as beautiful as they are in Thailand. Thus, In conclusion, traveling to foreign country provides amazing experiences that most of the time, cannot find in your own country, and offers collection of choices when choose destination for holidays. For those reasons, it is clear that People benefit more from traveling to foreign countries than traveling in their own country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 243, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'limited'.
Suggestion: limited
... never seen before. If destination were limit only within the country you were born, ...
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Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...beautiful as they are in Thailand. Thus, In conclusion, traveling to foreign coun...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23888888889 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67348087706 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497222222222 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.07161595 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2631578947 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9473684211 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344357856575 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123980819526 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118829417846 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256406595043 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102088447421 0.0645574589148 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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