There are certain considerations or factors which everyone can take into account to improve children’s responsibility. I certainly do not agree that controlling the financial resources by children is profitable. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
Firstly, it can waste children time. These days, human experience a huge advancements and improvements in different fields of science and engineering including transportation, communication, health caring, and artificial intelligence. In this modern world, the main duty of the children is to keep the pace with this technical and practical progress, and therefore any time wasting cannot be acceptable. The task of money management would be time consuming and bring children’s attention away from learning or education, and so this can harm their future life and career.
Furthermore, psychology problem is another noticeable reason that comes to mind. Arranging and planning of money would be a very sophisticated and problematic duty. Sometimes, expert and dexterous people need to gather and offer a proper solution or interpretation. Because of this, the children should feel stressed and pressured when they are forced to be liable for their money. This unwanted and critical situation or burden can change their attitude toward the life and prevent them from a healthy lifestyle and some daily activities.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that the youngsters should have an opportunity to control their own money. Chiefly, it helps children to learn more and become responsible adults. In fact, the children ought to control and save their money for necessary things such as educational books or school tuition. After a while, they would learn this lesson that any money wasting can cause budget limitation. However, still I affirm that managing money by children is not effective way. Although there are some benefits, they can be neglected compared to the negative effects which money management by children has. Besides, children have a chance to pass business and marketing class in school and learn how to be financial responsible.
Due to aforementioned ground, all people should bear in mind that arranging and managing money by children would not be an ideal way. Participation of time and healthiness are two prime and conspicuous supports.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Firstly, it can waste children time.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and time
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 373 350
No. of Characters: 1974 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.395 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.292 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.952 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.955 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.498 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.281 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.034 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h side. The explanations go as follows. Firstly, it can waste children time. The...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...can harm their future life and career. Furthermore, psychology problem is anoth...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... learn how to be financial responsible. Due to aforementioned ground, all people...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'while', 'in fact', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25768321513 0.229887763892 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.148936170213 0.158761421928 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0945626477541 0.0866891130778 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0354609929078 0.046263068375 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0307328605201 0.0685040099705 45% => OK
Prepositions: 0.080378250591 0.118717715034 68% => OK
Participles: 0.0260047281324 0.0351676179071 74% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.1081348304 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0283687943262 0.0309702414327 92% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0827423167849 0.0887237588012 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0378250591017 0.0209618222197 180% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0141843971631 0.0139019557991 102% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2419.0 2387.08602151 101% => OK
No of words: 373.0 408.028673835 91% => OK
Chars per words: 6.48525469169 5.86048508987 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.391420911528 0.338922669872 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.30563002681 0.251872472559 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.252010723861 0.174417080927 144% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.171581769437 0.112833075102 152% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1081348304 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58981233244 0.524397521467 112% => OK
Word variations: 69.3359872312 59.2087087015 117% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.9545454545 20.5533526081 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0182958969 48.84282405 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.954545455 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9545454545 20.5533526081 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.644075263715 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 47.5175481355 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.69230769231 1.45489161554 116% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307545760506 0.300154397459 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0584619247043 0.103427244359 57% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.05028630444 0.0752933317313 67% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.481556690194 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134092344075 0.151897553556 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110032944225 0.114077575197 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064775402333 0.0781384742642 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.353158647399 0.336927656856 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0847974952208 0.067059652881 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193655881986 0.210909579961 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616398716018 0.0618886996521 100% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.86379928315 259% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 2.4623655914 406% => Less negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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