With the recent trends in the world, advertising is a means by which companies, organizations and individuals promote their products in order to win the competitions in the world market.This is a tactful and organized way to ensure sustainability of a product in the myriads of product available in the market. Although, this is of paramount importance for the growth of a company, I concur that such advertisements should be limited for the obvious reasons which are elaborated here below.
First of all, unrealistic advertisements instills loss of confidence on the product and the company. Most advertisements aim to attract customers by exhibiting fanciful features about a product. Accordingly, it is necessary to display these magnificent and grand looks of a product but not at the expense of creating a negative mindsets for the customers.For instance, I remember vividly last week, when I watched a television program advertising a telephone company displaying some of the great and unique features of their phone. I was captivated and penchant to purchase the phone. Although, I spent a huge amount of money to buy this product, I could barely use the phone as it developed a mechanical problem. Consequently, I was despondent and promised never to patronize such company's products. This invariably results to loss of potential buyers for the product.
In addition, it is incontrovertible to say that unnecessary advertisements about a product results to the bad reputation. Extreme advertisements about a products instigates the downfall of a company. With the example mentioned above, imagine when two or three customers had to purchase the same phone model and observed similar problem. This will dissuade these customers from purchasing this product in the nearby future. More so, with world of social networking ,where news spreads like a fire, negative or bad feed backs about a company automatically results to decrease of the company's sales performance and dramatically to the folding up of the company.
To wrap it up, even though it is a necessity that company's will have to advertise their products in order to entice customers, I subscribe that such advertisements should be limited as it has repercussions on the performance of the company.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, if, look, so, still, for instance, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27900552486 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27518663149 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527624309392 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.1385614346 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.4 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1333333333 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116402995297 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441841339891 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280897935828 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755251697562 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0100081539502 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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