There is no doubt that for progressing our life conditions, we should have a policy in order to deal with any situation. Some people motivated to take a venture in a variety subjects as big mutation of their life. In my perspective, I side with those people who believe that taking ventures are best opportunity to diminish our problems and refresh our life. I will discuss my reasons below and tell some advantages of taking venture.
The first aspect that deserves to be outlined is that making more money and experience. Nowadays, most people everyday encounter with many events and some who want to promote their practical skill, prefer to have a challenge. Although it depends on people who have a potential ability and they should able to remove all of the obstacles in their life. For example, I am a boss of a big company and last year, my colleague and I had a critical condition because we fastened a big contract with a foreign company. At first, many people told us, this contract has worked to the detriment of salaried and did not any profitable. After six months, we were earned a big revenue and good experience of selling our products and also a big advantage was that we created a lot of new jobs and positions. As a result, by taking venture, it is not important that people think about you and your situation, it is much important to broad your source of money and experience.
On the other hand, the proponents of this idea who do not like taking venture, believe that taking venture is entirely fail and not only for a money, for any career and occupation. Statistically, %70 percent of people do not like taking ventures. For instant, they might drive with extreme caution, when they want to buy a house or car, they have a great care and attention in order to take action and make decisions. Additionally, these people who detest of taking venture, have some characteristic such as always they talking about problems and how can challenge them or they ask themselves, if I do this action, I will lose my money or job because they do not have an expediency in any opportunity of their life. Hence, by thinking about the future problem and do not any professional policy, people do not have an interest in taking venture.
From what have been discussed above are the advantages and disadvantages of brought by taking venture, I strongly support this statement that by taking a venture and by considering our condition and strong incentive, we can enhance the quality and performance of work and life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'are the best'.
Suggestion: are the best
...people who believe that taking ventures are best opportunity to diminish our problems an...
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Line 2, column 316, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... ability and they should able to remove all of the obstacles in their life. For example, I...
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Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'failed'.
Suggestion: failed
...believe that taking venture is entirely fail and not only for a money, for any caree...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'for example', 'no doubt', 'such as', 'talking about', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.217213114754 0.229887763892 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.170081967213 0.158761421928 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0696721311475 0.0866891130778 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0348360655738 0.046263068375 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0840163934426 0.0685040099705 123% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125 0.118717715034 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0450819672131 0.0351676179071 128% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69897200005 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0225409836066 0.0309702414327 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0922131147541 0.0887237588012 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0143442622951 0.0209618222197 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0184426229508 0.0139019557991 133% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2525.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 443.0 408.028673835 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69977426637 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.331828442438 0.338922669872 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.241534988713 0.251872472559 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.171557562077 0.174417080927 98% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.103837471783 0.112833075102 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69897200005 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503386004515 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 57.0888944663 59.2087087015 96% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0588235294 20.5533526081 127% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3043911454 48.84282405 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.529411765 120.699889404 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0588235294 20.5533526081 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.647058823529 0.644075263715 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 50.2123224007 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.34042553191 1.45489161554 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262315345247 0.300154397459 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.118317593749 0.103427244359 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0878709601007 0.0752933317313 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.528275401218 0.497263757937 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147770717117 0.151897553556 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109276492083 0.114077575197 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357422073006 0.0781384742642 46% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.360105937967 0.336927656856 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0415800214463 0.067059652881 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175933106121 0.210909579961 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417962359175 0.0618886996521 68% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.86379928315 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 2.4623655914 366% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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