TPO 21 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today in our modern world there are different aspects for employees to succeed in their career like dealing well with co- workers. It is of utmost importance to have a good working relationship with peers because they are the person who will help you to achieve your goals in your career. Some people believe that to be successful in work, the ability to relate well to people is important than studying hard in school. In my humble opinion, I chose the former option. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, good working relationship with fellow worker means having harmonious relationship in the work space. As a result, cooperation and trust can be built among the employee in the company. When people maintain trust and cooperation with each other, then work will become more easier and productive. In other words, team work will be dominant in the work field rather than hatred, jealousy or rivalry. Employees will help each other to reach their main focus in their work, which is to be successful in project or deal in their company. Hence, each person will benefit from this act because everybody will grow and shine to their office. To sum, it is important in every situation to have a good working relationship with friends, peers and co workers because they can help you to become successful individual, they will give you a helping hand when you needed it the most.
Secondly, the ability to relate well to people brings easy communication with other employees and it can lead to gaining new friends in return. Having this trait in the office can reap into positive outcome like it will be easier to share your ideas with co workers because you will not be shy to voice out ideas and inputs. Hence, more creative ideas will be tackled and possible solutions to problems will be raised. For instance, I am new in my work as a dialysis nurse. I gained a lot of friends on my first day of work and on our 3rd week my head nurse conducted a meeting regarding quality services being rendered by nurses to our patients, so she discussed some problems and I raise suggestions in order to make our working routine more productive other nurses gave comments on how to make our services better and we come up of the best solution we can cater to the needs of our patients. All in all, easy communication with peers are beneficial because you can share thoughts and ideas which can result in the betterment of the company.
To summarize, I believe it is more beneficial to have the capability to get along well with peers. This is because it will be easier to have positive outcome like gaining productivity and creativity in the work environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 281, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
... with each other, then work will become more easier and productive. In other words, team wo...
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Line 4, column 457, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...ees will help each other to reach their main focus in their work, which is to be successfu...
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Line 7, column 524, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a lot of friends on my first day of work and on our 3rd week my head nurse conduc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance, i feel, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2243.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69246861925 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51939918331 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462343096234 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.9901275804 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.15 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152397357156 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598686463153 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752496329417 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118233812796 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846406093837 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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