It is no doubt that the world had undergone great changes that we need a different view of jobs. In my opinion, there are some jobs truly need to be done quickly, but not all the jobs need this change. I will express my idea using specific examples.
To begin with, in the fields of science, it is important to work quickly and scientists do not care about mistakes. For scientists, competition in the same fields is common that it forced scientists to work faster than others. If they are later than other scientists who first publish thesis, what they have done like ten years’ effort, is almost useless. Like the most famous scientists, Newtown was believed as the father of calculous which is, in fact totally different from the calculous we use today which invented by Leibniz. He is just some years later than Newtown, however, such delay caused that we are more familiar with Newtown than Leibniz. What’s more, making mistakes is acceptable because no theories are perfect in the first time without any one’s revise.
Then, working quickly is also important when accounts for commerce. In the modern society, a successful merchant not depends on his intelligence, but the speed of starting plans and ideas. Take Ma Yun, the boss of Taobao, who is the richest person in China as an instance. Though there are various of competitors and even some offer better services than Taobao, no one can compare with Taobao in online shopmarketing. A possible and strong reason is that his web is the first since twenty years ago he had persisted in it. At that time, when all other people were still waiting for a better chance, Taobao has became the first web for people to shop. Thus we have to admit that to be the first is the key factor to success in commerce.
However, not all jobs need to be worked quickly, especially some jobs which need patience like education and medicine. For example, when a teacher faces students who cannot study well, he or she has to care about these students with patience or they will lose confidence even give up study forever. In this case, working quickly is not just unimportant, but even harmful.
Due to the aforementioned ground, whether need to work quickly even make mistakes depends on the jobs. Truly many jobs like scientists and merchants need the high working speed and it is acceptable to make mistakes, on the other hand, some jobs like teachers should put patience on the first.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 611, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...waiting for a better chance, Taobao has became the first web for people to shop. Thus ...
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Line 5, column 652, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ecame the first web for people to shop. Thus we have to admit that to be the first i...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, still, then, thus, well, as to, even so, for example, in fact, no doubt, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79481132075 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47963290492 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528301886792 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3745748274 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8095238095 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1904761905 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38095238095 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177734963073 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559416722217 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535196995964 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0946199326722 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553185017684 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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