Preparation for adult life is a very important part of our lives. All parents want to provide for their children enough knowledge and experience to ensure that children will solve all difficulties that he will face. Some people believe that if parents encourage their teenager children to take a part-time job, it will prepare them for adult life; others disagree. Even though some people might find idea that children should take a part-job is awful because children will get pressure on workers. In my view, the idea that teen gets a part-time job is excellent for two important reasons.
The main reason that teenager gets a lot of different experience from the work. Doing job children get knowledge which he could not get in a school such as working in a team, communication with customers and partners. For instance, my friend, Vladimir, worked as a waiter at the Italian restaurant to cover the university's tuition. He worked ten hours per week and make enough money not only to pay for his education but also on his own project. My friend is very intelligent and talented person but he had one huge drawback, it was difficult for him to speak with other people. By doing his work he got accustomed to speaking with different people such as visitors, supervisor or other waiters. After he dropped his work, he started his own business in IT field. And he often has to speak with investors to improve his company and his experience helps him to do that. This example clearly illustrates how part-job prepare for the real life.
Another important reason is that part-time job motivates student to learn and study better. All part-time jobs that unskilled, young children could take have a small salary, as a result, children will realize that in order to get a well-paid job he has to study better. For instance, my classmate, Zakhar, worker as a housekeeper in the hotel. He had been earning a small salary and hated his job. After some time, he realized that with his salary he doesn't have the future. He started to code by himself after his work. He bought a lot of books to improve his skills and increase the amount of his knowledges. He worked at the hotel until his programing skill became so profesional that he was able to find a job in the international company with good salary, medical insurence and long vacations. Now, he is earning ten times more than it was before and he is doing the job that he likes. On the other hand, if my friend hadn't taken a part-job, he would have lived with his mom. As you can see, part-time job motivates to study better.
In conclusion, part-time job prepares children to adult life. It not only gives a lot of different experience for children, but also motivates them to study. That's why all parents should encourage children to take a part-time job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2321.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7174796748 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55931921527 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469512195122 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3676486365 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8928571429 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262148778951 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969733103 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878888155416 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211950003907 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.083751015703 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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