Without the shadow of doubt helping out in a communite has has always played a prominent role in development of human social interactions an has been a nessery ingrediant for community development. Some people may hold the view that younger participant do not commit themselves to community they are living in; However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint. I personnaly believe that not only nowadays younger people participate in community works but also it is alot more than it was before. Among myriad reasons which can support my idea, I will delve ito most conspicouos ones, which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
First and foremost, I believe that nowadays people are a lot more aware of the role that participating in community works play than they were before. The need for living a society with higher standars are more tangible now wich results in taking part in communities. For instance, I live in Iran a country with a lot of problems but there is institute called mahak. This instute tries to provide medical treatment for those who are suffering from cancer which are mostly childerens with the age of fifteen or less because curring cancer is costly. People pay an arbitary amount of money monthly to some of these expences and as a result lots of kid now have better life. Another type of participation for this notion is doing social work which I myselfe take part in. The kids who are receiving meducal treatments for cance live a hard life since they always have to spend their time in a hospital but me and some of my friends join them give them a feeling that they are not alone. For example we teach them for free or play with them whcih helps to maintain their energy and keep on going.
The second reason one should take into account This sihnificant is these community gatherings are one of the best places that one can make new friends. Finding friend and getting to know new people in these communities are enjoyable due to their line of work and their passions. Accourding to a noteworthy statistics released by recent research conducted for this most of the frienships that was started in this manner were stable for a long time. For example, In another coomunity that I joined for teaching kids english language for free I meet a girl whose name is pantea. She is a lot like me because I met her in one of the places that only people with some specific carechters go. We used to teach kids English language and during our free time we chat with each other until we had found out that we love each other so we decided to take our relation ship a step further. Now after three years that we have been together we decided to get married.
To warp it up, all aforementioned reasonns and examples lead us to the conclusion that based on todays's life style living in society wit high standard of living and meeting with people who are like you allbeit the diversity is a lot, participating in communties is essential. Actually there are some reasons and examples advocated the claim which is not above but ithink those can support my claim.
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...the claim which is not above but ithink those can support my claim.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2551.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 546.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67216117216 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51398228678 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525641025641 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 819.9 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.5111558425 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.476190476 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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