It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
It is no doubt that choosing a suitable job is a crucial thing for children which is also a big trouble. Some may think it is a good idea to follow their parents, however, in my point of view, it depends on children’s interests and the need of society to choose their jobs.
To begin with, no one can insist on a job which takes oneself more than ten years or even a whole life’s time without interests. If you don’t love your job, even you have a high salary, you cannot do it well thus you have to give up after many times of failure. Take my brother, Li as an example. After graduated, he became an employee who worked in a large company which his father also worked in. Though the payment is good, he never felt satisfy because he couldn’t show off his talents in such a huge company that everything is unchangeable. Finally, he had to quit this job and built his own company to achieve his dream. So choosing job that are similar to parents’ jobs is quite unwise for wasting one’s talent without considering one’s interests.
Moreover, some parents’ jobs are not necessary in the modern society. With the high improvement of science and technology, various of jobs are taken place by robots or other new jobs thus you don’t need to do what your parents have done. For instance, many car factories need workers to assemble cars many years ago, however, on the contrary, what they need now is just some robots which never feel tired or hungry. What’s more, without payment for robots, the owners of many factories do not need workers any more. According to a research by the Peking University, more than one hundred of jobs will disappear in the following thirty years and two hundreds of new jobs are heavily wanted now. If you still insist on your parent’s jobs, soon you will find there’s no need for your job.
Admittedly, following your parents’ jobs gives you more facilities for you learn a lot of experience from parents. So you can adapt to the job more quickly than normal fresher. But without any interests, any difficulty that you face up can cause you give up in a large possibility. What’s more, when your parents’ job is discarded by the society, how can you preset it forever?
For the aforementioned ground, I firmly believe it is not wise for a young adult to choose a job similar to their parents’, especially when considering he has no interests or the job is outdated.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 655, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
...mpany to achieve his dream. So choosing job that are similar to parents' jobs ...
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Line 8, column 545, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...not need workers any more. According to a research by the Peking University, more than one...
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Line 8, column 661, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: 'two hundred'.
Suggestion: two hundred
...ppear in the following thirty years and two hundreds of new jobs are heavily wanted now. If you...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, well, for instance, no doubt, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77995642702 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.799376917 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498910675381 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4125083163 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.476190476 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.524806964246 0.236089414692 222% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186872982712 0.076458572812 244% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168178752883 0.0737576698707 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.367160204715 0.150856017488 243% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.182112682839 0.0645574589148 282% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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