I think it is better for children to choose jobs that comfort them regardless of they are similar to their parent's jobs. I think this way because it is better for children future lives.
First of all, it is more worthwhile for children to choose jobs that they desire, otherwise, they won't love working in these jobs. Thereafter, their job productivity will be not perfect. Moreover, children won't like their lives as it becomes boring for them by doing tasks that they don't enjoy. We can observe that children become more creative with toys that they like most; I expect the same if they choose to work in things they like most as well.
Secondly, when children choose their desire jobs, they will work hard to be better at doing it. Sometimes they look for many ways to improve their skills and they may spend many hours as it is considered desirable and enjoyable for them. I had a young brother who likes to be a computer repairer, which is totally different from my parents' jobs, they are teachers. I saw him spending four two five hours on Youtube program watching videos on fixing and repairing technologies tools, such as phones, radios, and laptops. After three years, when he got to high school his computer passion enlarged, and he enrolled in an online course that teaches his area of interest in order to become better and enhancing his skills. Eventually, now he has his own computer repair store and he is happy with his job and current life.
Last but not least, it is not a good idea for children to have jobs that are similar to their parents because of its bad outcomes, which could destroy the child goals or future. A friend of mine work with his father in their own farm since he was a child. I got to know him because he used to look at me every day when I got out of school. He did not complete his education because he works with his father. He told me that his goals to be a doctor, and there is no way to be because he is too old in school and may never reach this goal. I feel him that he is so destroyed from inside because he did not have the life that he wanted.
All in all, it is more beneficial for children to choose their interest jobs. This is because they become more enjoyable and productive, which is a happy life. Otherwise, their lives won't be perfect.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, i feel, i think, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1884.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43294117647 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26646257308 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484705882353 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5872426144 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7142857143 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2380952381 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223501973476 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0863645130623 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870603775164 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161211980193 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073801301964 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.