There are enourmos number of examples of family business or jobs which are inherited from generation to generation. Why does some offsprings decide to have the same job like their parents? I suppose that is is better for them to choose a job their parents has for succeeding in life. I will try to explain my point of view by providing several examples.
First of all, children can get enough valuable experiece, because they can get enough practice in their parent’s work. Likewise, children have a great example of their future job in their parents and they are able to discuss with them possible pros and cons of particular work.I daresay that parent’s example of children is inspire for moving forward and gain important skills. Therefore, it is important to get insperation from someone for desiring to study and learm more, for mastering important skills.
Secondly, parent will provide a work place for their children if they choose the job same as their parents. For example, my friend decided to bacome a doctor, as his father is. In addition, I want to say that it is really hard to find a good job with big salary streight after graduation. The fact that my friend’s father was workin in the cardiology influence of my friend positively. He started to work immidietly after graduaton and gain a lot of important experience, Now, he is vary respectful and proffetional cardiologist.
To wrap up, I don’t think that having connections, such as your family member at work is cheeting and untrustful. Otherwise, It is a possibility to acquentience with particular speciality from the young age.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ssible pros and cons of particular work.I daresay that parent's example of c...
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Suggestion: inspired
...at parent's example of children is inspire for moving forward and gain important s...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'varied'.
Suggestion: varied
...lot of important experience, Now, he is vary respectful and proffetional cardiologis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, likewise, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, as for, for example, i suppose, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1360.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 271.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0184501845 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90108720439 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583025830258 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5243517539 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1428571429 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3571428571 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.14285714286 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35085531532 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119062658711 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115115911737 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205579281604 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0958708302787 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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