As a matter of fact, each person like to have a secure job. People have been trying to find a stable job during the history, because they want to cover their expenses and they want to be able to pay their bills right away. I personally think, most of people prefer to get a secure job right away instead of waiting for a pleasant job in the future.
First and foremost, people love to have enough money in their pocket to pay their expenses every day. They should have a salary to do that. If a person get a job offer in a stable company, he/she would take it fast, because they want to be sure that they have enough money to pay their child's tuition or water bill etc. Those kinds of expenses will not stand away for people. Each person should take care of his/her bills and it is not possible without a continues salary.
Second of all, job market is competitive nowadays. People are aware of that and try to be away of these kinds of competitions. Consequently, people will get the first job offer no matter what it is. In the other word, they do not care about satisfaction at all. They just want to have an opportunity to work and make money. For instance, I used to work in a distribution company back in my home country Iran. When I graduated from the university of Isfahan, I got this job offer and I did not care about satisfaction at all, because the market was competitive and I did not want to loose it.
Last but not least, each person have a family. For most of people having a family is something nice, but sometimes people will be under a high pressure by their families. For example, imagine a man as a father in a family, who has a big responsibility. He can choose between a variety of job offers, but his family is going to persuade him for getting a job that has a secure future. He might love to take another job, but he will change his mind and take an stable job.
Furthermore, people can change the atmosphere of their job. It is not unchangeable to change the job atmosphere. I can remember an example from the top of my head. When I was in the third grade in school, my father was working in an international bank and he was totally unsatisfied with his job, but he decided to change his situation and he talked to his manager and did some extra work as an employee and he got a new job after six months. As we all know, the new job was his favorite job.
To sum up, I strongly believe that people should take a secure job instead of waiting for a pleasant job. They can pay their expenses and they can change the atmosphere in their job. Many ways are existed to be happy at work.
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Essay evaluation report
If a person get a job offer
If a person gets a job offer
and I did not want to loose it.
and I did not want to lose it.
each person have a family.
each person has a family.
flaws:
No. of Words: 499 while No. of Different Words: 207 //it means it is wordy
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Less examples wanted. more arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 499 350
No. of Characters: 2056 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.726 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.12 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.325 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.481 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.481 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.481 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.306 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...r bills right away. I personally think, most of people prefer to get a secure job right away i...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 582, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[3]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...t was competitive and I did not want to loose it. Last but not least, each person h...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 52, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...t least, each person have a family. For most of people having a family is something nice, but ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 457, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...b, but he will change his mind and take an stable job. Furthermore, people can c...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'as a matter of fact', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.20802919708 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.167883211679 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0656934306569 0.0866891130778 76% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0456204379562 0.046263068375 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0912408759124 0.0685040099705 133% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.105839416058 0.118717715034 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0164233576642 0.0351676179071 47% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.40158693437 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0419708029197 0.0309702414327 136% => OK
Particles: 0.0036496350365 0.00188951952338 193% => OK
Determiners: 0.10401459854 0.0887237588012 117% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0255474452555 0.0209618222197 122% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00912408759124 0.0139019557991 66% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2611.0 2387.08602151 109% => OK
No of words: 497.0 408.028673835 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25352112676 5.86048508987 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.259557344064 0.338922669872 77% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.154929577465 0.251872472559 62% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0885311871227 0.174417080927 51% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0543259557344 0.112833075102 48% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.40158693437 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430583501006 0.524397521467 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.7849069096 59.2087087015 82% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6684587814 135% => OK
Sentence length: 17.75 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5050064413 48.84282405 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.25 120.699889404 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.464285714286 0.644075263715 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 33.2429577465 45.7405998639 73% => OK
Elegance: 1.08383233533 1.45489161554 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340265786307 0.300154397459 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10881418385 0.103427244359 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0860499382784 0.0752933317313 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.465693400563 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.144809542447 0.151897553556 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122129282169 0.114077575197 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632850376109 0.0781384742642 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.334552126666 0.336927656856 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0782710362151 0.067059652881 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228681948166 0.210909579961 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467881294519 0.0618886996521 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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