There is no shortage of debate about the best improvement option a university should implement in order to increase its quality of education. However, in my opinion, there are more effective measures to increase quality of education rather than by raising professors’ salaries. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, a good university is not made only by excellent and well-paid professors. Although professors are one of the main important factors related to the quality of education, there are other points that should be considered. Students common areas can also significantly affect the quality of education, and my own experience demonstrates that this is true. When I was in college, my department did not have an area that students could study or spend time socializing. I had to go to a shopping mall next to my university if I wanted to read or relax with my friends, which ended not being a relaxing activity at all, once the mall was always crowed and noisy. In light of this, me and other students decided to talk to the department coordinator and they created a comfortable lounge for us, which enabled me to spend more time studying on campus, and consequently, my grades started getting even better.
Second, it would be ineffective if the university invest only on professors’ salary but do not provide a motivating and engaging environment for them to teach. Professors also need good work facilities, like well-equipped classrooms, materials, the use of technology, and so students. For example, I remember when my university was facing troubles with the suppliers’ payment and the laboratory did not have enough resources to keep with the anatomy classes. Our professor was one of the best in the country, but he could not teach us anything without masks, gloves and the chirurgical instruments. And things were getting even worse. The x-ray machine from our department broke and our university did not have money to fix it. In the end, the coordinator had to reduce professors’ salary in order to put the university on track again.
In conclusion, these are few of the many reasons why I think universities should not invest their money on professors’ salaries in order to improve the quality of education. An education of good quality is made of several other things, such as improvements on campus as well as the provision of resources, which results in a good environment for those who need the most, students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, well, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05035971223 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08585482251 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539568345324 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1721905246 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200730471976 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648363148524 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575479012501 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129984443643 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245541033389 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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