TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
class="MsoNormal">On every list of crucial responsibilities of universities, amending the quality of educations ranks near the top. No one class="can">can deny class="that">that there are positive aspects of increasing the university class="professor">professor's income. class="if">if I were to spend the budget of the university to class="boost">boost students educational background, I class="would">would definitely dedicate class="these">these funding for professors. It class="is">is class="my">my firm belief class="that">that professors class="can">can class="boost">boost the knowledge of the students class="when">when they class="have">have a good source of revenue for a number of class="reason">reason, and I will develop class="these">these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
class="MsoNormal">To begin with, one should take into account the class="fact">fact class="that">that providing high-pay positions for professors gives class="them">them a sense of purpose. As a class="matter">matter of class="fact">fact, Their motivation increase to class="teach">teach students with high efficiency because they establish for themselves both short and long term to educate students. As a class="result">result, class="these">these professors strive for each day to learn a wide range of fields for students. class="my">my class="own">own experience class="is">is a compelling answer. class="when">when I was a sophomore in university, class="my">my class="professor">professor always complained class="about">about his income in the class, and he was not class="have">have plenty of incentive to class="teach">teach us courses. class="when">when the university decided to improve their revenue, class="my">my class="professor">professor encouraged to inform us with various lessons. Thus, our knowledge increase gradually. Had class="my">my class="professor">professor had a low-paying position, he class="would">would not class="have">have like a person, who class="have">have a impetus to class="teach">teach courses.
class="MsoNormal">The second remarkable class="reason">reason class="is">is class="that">that class="when">when the university increase class="professor">professor's salaries, the class="have">have a sense of satisfaction class="about">about their life. Therefore, they class="can">can easily relax and release their tension, so class="these">these happiness allows class="them">them to focus on a specific areas of a subject in the class rather than doing a broad overview in the class for student. Not only do students interests increase, but also they perceive lessons appropriatly for themselves. class="my">my opinion on this class="matter">matter has been profoundly influenced by class="my">my class="own">own experience. class="when">when I was a freshman in university, all class="my">my class="professor">professor had a fun time in the university, and in their free time pursuing their hobbies. class="when">when they had a class they had any anxiety and had enough concentrations in the class. I realized the class="reason">reason for this sense of satisfaction class="is">is class="that">that they class="have">have a profit job. As a class="result">result, we understand all the lessons swiftly and amend our knowledge steadily.
class="MsoNormal">In conclusion, I strongly believe class="that">that university class="can">can increase the quality of education class="if">if expend more money for professors' salaries because they encourage to work meticulously and class="teach">teach all courses very well and because they class="can">can class="have">have a anxiety-free life.
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... and amend our knowledge steadily. class='MsoNormal'>In conclusion,...
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...;>can class='have'>have a anxiety-free life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4176.0 1977.66487455 211% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 9.62211981567 4.8611393121 198% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 10.2304863617 2.67179642975 383% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523041474654 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1117.8 618.680645161 181% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.6 1.51630824373 171% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 29.0 9.59856630824 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 104.628746543 48.9658058833 214% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 198.857142857 100.406767564 198% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0171483884988 0.236089414692 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0131542034103 0.076458572812 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0128062724866 0.0737576698707 17% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0177650351567 0.150856017488 12% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00562923571121 0.0645574589148 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.2 11.7677419355 291% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -33.42 58.1214874552 -58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.9 10.1575268817 225% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 38.52 10.9000537634 353% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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