TPO 30 independent writing task
According to my point of view, it depends on each persons' aspects and views, and I believe that both method can be favorable for some people, and can be undesirable for others. I hold this view because of several reasons. First, lets consider a job, where ones' work only three days a week for long hours. This method has several advantages and dis advantages, as I already mentioned, it depends on individuals demands and aspects, but I personally do not prefer this pattern. Second, have a job, where ones' work five days a week for shorter hours, also, has several benefits, specifically for whom is interested in working regularly and softly.
On one hand, a job where you work only three days a week for long hours, which I do not personally interested in, has several benefits. First, you have for days a week for resting, doing your personal affairs, and spending your time with your family, even you can take a trip during that four-day, so, it seems desirable for most of the people. Beside, you can apply on an extra work for compensating your expenses during that four days. However, working in a job, where you should work for long hours, can be exhausting and boring. In other words, it might have various harmful impacts on workers, specifically for their health, because they work for long hours and they are getting tired.
On the other hand, have a job where ones' works five days a week for shorter hours can also has manifold profits. For instance, my father, who is an employer in a public association, works five days a week for 8 hours each day. Therefore, when he turns back to home from his job everyday, he has enough time to do his personal occupations, such as watching a TV, reading newspaper, and so many other things. but, it is not so good for us because I have not several opportunities during a year to take a long trip, because my father can not spend with us so many days.
Generally, I think it is better to work in a job where ones' works five days a week for shorter hours, but each method has its own benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 29, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd softly. On one hand, a job where you work only three days a week for long hou...
^^
Line 3, column 37, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...d. On the other hand, have a job where ones works five days a week for shorter hour...
^^^^
Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...when he turns back to home from his job everyday, he has enough time to do his personal ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ng newspaper, and so many other things. but, it is not so good for us because I hav...
^^^
Line 3, column 538, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e a long trip, because my father can not spend with us so many days. Generally, ...
^^
Line 4, column 56, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ink it is better to work in a job where ones works five days a week for shorter hour...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, i think, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52291105121 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47615754936 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471698113208 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2183088774 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.866666667 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7333333333 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.93333333333 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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