TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

In my opinion, working five days a week with shorter hours is good because one can get more success in the outcome and they can maintain good relationships in their life.

To begin with, the main advantage of working shorter hours for five days in a week is diminishing the failure of the outcome. If a person works long hours, he may feel more stressed and cannot get good results in his work or project. This is because our brain cannot work continuously for a long time without breaks. Even if it works, it takes more time to get the correct results in the project. As a result, more time would be wasted to solve a problem.

Second, another benefit is one can balance between work and the family. For instance, children go to school every day and come home at around 4 or 5 p.m if parents were not present in the home they definitely feel very lonely and get bored. Furthermore, no one takes care of the children. In contrast, if parents were at home by doing shorter hours of work, they can have a lot of time to spend with their kids which is more enjoyable and can have more fun. Moreover, parents can also have fun with their friends. Therefore, everyone in the family can enjoy.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that working shorter hours for five days a week is more beneficial and everyone can enjoy a lot with their family and friends.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1115.0 1977.66487455 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 248.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49596774194 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36646145718 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 212.727598566 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 618.680645161 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7759811903 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7692307692 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0769230769 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0769230769 5.45110844103 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275582433744 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103971998299 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868164605619 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195366147625 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444140412792 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 86.8835125448 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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