TPO 30. Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Human activity has significant effects on the earth. Many believe that these activities are harmful to the planet while on the other hand, some claim that the result was fabulous and we have a better place to live. I agree with the view that human activities are such a mess and are nothing more than a shame.
Mass extinction is known to be the direct outcome of human activities. Not only we are destroying our environment, but also our ancestors were great devastators. They demolished wherever they stepped in, and wildly hunted as many fauna as they could in order to use their meat and skin or reduce the probable threat of their existence to their farms and families. They destroyed jungles to create their private farms in which they could cultivate wheat, rice, grains, etc. Thus, little by little, the suitable habitats for wild animals were restricted. They completely manipulated the natural procedures of nature and changed them as the way they desired. No other animal could ever have this negative impact on the environment as humans did.
By the advent of the industrial revolution, the mass production has needed an abundant of workers to dig the coal mines in order to use their extracted materials as a source of energy which caused lots of pollution. From then on, people have never put aside that habit and continually go on polluting the weather with fossil fuels emitting from cars, factories, and homes. Today, climate change is of the top concerns of international communities, NGOs, and environmental communities. Furthermore, the universities and governments pay a lot of money on related researches. We are now experiencing many unpredictable fluctuations in the weather temperature and the level of precipitations and also the arctic glaciers melting is a grave concern of all earth dwellings.
At last, we cover all the free waters with plastics. Plastics are unrecyclable and there is no way to omit them from the surface of the earth. It takes such a long time for plastics to decompose, and it means that human invented another dangerous material to present to the planet. It is claimed that by 2040, over 98 percent of marine animals will have a piece of plastic in their stomachs, which will be remained inside forever and impose many health problems for them.
- Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enoug 63
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- A pet food company recalled 4 million pounds of pet food in response to complaints that pets that had consumed the food experienced vomiting, lethargy, and other signs of illness. After the recall, the pet food company tested samples from the recalled foo 29
- TPO-52. Integrated Writing Task. Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage. 3
- Some people believe that competition drives young athletes to perform at their best while others believe that competition discourages those who are not athletically talented from participating in organized sports 54
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mess and are nothing more than a shame. Mass extinction is known to be the dir...
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Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun fauna seems to be countable; consider using: 'many faunae', 'many faunas'.
Suggestion: many faunae; many faunas
...r they stepped in, and wildly hunted as many fauna as they could in order to use their mea...
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Line 3, column 557, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...itats for wild animals were restricted. They completely manipulated the natural proc...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mpact on the environment as humans did. By the advent of the industrial revoluti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, then, thus, well, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97668393782 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77088374339 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60103626943 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2007052074 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.105263158 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89473684211 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144010195278 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472313106795 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651336767137 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101897560714 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0958052537787 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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