Technology is going to effect on each aspect of human's life nowadays. People are trying to learn how to use new technologies. Also, people trying hard to save money to buy new introduced products. As we all know, new products have influenced people's life in last decades, so I strongly believe that these modern life styles are leading people to be unsatisfied and unhappy.
First of all, companies are introducing new instruments or new apps every day. They are making some attractive product to attract people especially young people. People have to save money in other aspects of their life such as family dinners or trips to make an ability to afford these new devices, so they will feel confused in their life, because they have a modern life style, but they are still disgusted.
Second of all, people should learn quickly. New technologies need new lessons. Undoubtedly, people have to learn how to work with these new devices or apps. They should spend hours in front of TV or websites and watch videos to be familiar with these new guests in their life. As a matter of fact, every person has limited time and each person should manage his/her time. If people spend more time on learning new instruments, they would have less time for other things such as their children or their relations.
Last but not least, new technologies such as smart phones or online games are going to lead people in a solitary cave. Furthermore, as an example, members in a family will be in separate rooms to focus on their favorite new app and these kinds of changes will make them anxious, but people used to share a room together and watch a TV series together in the past.
To sum up, continuous changes in human's life are not a good sign in their life. These huge changes will make them unhappy and alone in their life. Additionally, people will reluctant to avoid of group activities by these new modern changes, so they will be unsatisfied in their life and they will not find out the reason of that, because their life looks fancy, but their feelings are poor.
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Essay evaluation report
Technology is going to effect on each aspect
Technology is going to affect on each aspect
Also, people trying hard to save money to buy new introduced products.
Also, people are trying hard to save money to buy new introduced products.
Sentence: Additionally, people will reluctant to avoid of group activities by these new modern changes, so they will be unsatisfied in their life and they will not find out the reason of that, because their life looks fancy, but their feelings are poor.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to will and reluctant
flaws:
More sentences varieties wanted. Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You, people...') as the subject of a sentence. Look:
They are making some attractive product to attract people especially young people.
People have to save money in other aspects of their life such as family dinners or trips to make an ability to afford these new devices, so
they will feel confused in their life, because
they have a modern life style, but
they are still disgusted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 364 350
No. of Characters: 1653 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.368 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.541 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.316 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.515 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241895261845 0.229887763892 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.15710723192 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.114713216958 0.0866891130778 132% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0374064837905 0.046263068375 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0573566084788 0.0685040099705 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.104738154613 0.118717715034 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0374064837905 0.0351676179071 106% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.39964670426 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0448877805486 0.0309702414327 145% => OK
Particles: 0.00498753117207 0.00188951952338 264% => OK
Determiners: 0.0673316708229 0.0887237588012 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0274314214464 0.0209618222197 131% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00498753117207 0.0139019557991 36% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2068.0 2387.08602151 87% => OK
No of words: 363.0 408.028673835 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69696969697 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.29476584022 0.338922669872 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.176308539945 0.251872472559 70% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.123966942149 0.174417080927 71% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0661157024793 0.112833075102 59% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39964670426 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501377410468 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 53.2175152932 59.2087087015 90% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.1666666667 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8223896896 48.84282405 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.888888889 120.699889404 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.722222222222 0.644075263715 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 37.7975206612 45.7405998639 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.52475247525 1.45489161554 105% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233339957291 0.300154397459 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.132510771385 0.103427244359 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0868578496859 0.0752933317313 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.54847363883 0.497263757937 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.169346558485 0.151897553556 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944098953507 0.114077575197 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443229704446 0.0781384742642 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.369984405795 0.336927656856 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0443436340939 0.067059652881 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156300863883 0.210909579961 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0153342361552 0.0618886996521 25% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8870967742 34% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 8.42114695341 47% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.75985663082 290% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.