Being happy and satisfied are important parts of our lives. People tend to be happy with their works, their educations, and their family as well. Some people believe that because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past; other people disagree. I have to agree with the idea for two important reasons which are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
First, people work a lot and do not have time to devote to each other. It is very obvious that todays there are a lot of equipments. People have to work a lot to can afford to buy them. Of course, it is common these equipments are necessary. So, they do not have time to spend with each others. For example, in my family, every one works. Not only does my father work every day from eight in the morning to eight in the evening, but my mother also works as well. My brother and his wife work at a park near our house as a agriculture engineer. I can meet my parents just when we are having breakfast. I can see my brother one time a month for about ten minuts. As you can see we cannot meet each other. In fact, we cannot get to gether and talk about things. So we do not have a enjoyable time with each other.
Second, changing world specially changing technology is an important negative role in being happy in our lives. Of course, although technology has a great positive role in our lives, it isolate people from each other. Game technology waste our time and we could not have a great time with people such as our parents, our grandparents and even our friends. For example, my father says when they were children, there were not any online games or even computer game. Therefore, they have to play games such as soccer, biking bicycle. In fact, they had a face to face communication. They could be happier than now. So type of game has a important role in our life.
To sum up, I completely agree with the idea that people now are less happy than thoes who were in the past. Not only do people have to work a lot but also some technology has a negative impact on our lives. We should work enough.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 520, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...s wife work at a park near our house as a agriculture engineer. I can meet my par...
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Line 2, column 661, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... one time a month for about ten minuts. As you can see we cannot meet each other. ...
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Line 2, column 777, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nd talk about things. So we do not have a enjoyable time with each other. Secon...
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Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'isolates'?
Suggestion: isolates
... a great positive role in our lives, it isolate people from each other. Game technology...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e happier than now. So type of game has a important role in our life. To sum up...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...type of game has a important role in our life. To sum up, I completely agree wit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in fact, of course, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3709273183 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29135740979 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443609022556 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3107198847 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.2857142857 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.25 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64285714286 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281981227714 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743008451379 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113792727939 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226038677212 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168031524748 0.0645574589148 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 11.7677419355 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.47 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.47 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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