TPO-32 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe

Nowadays, with an era of progress young people have much easier life than before, so they always think about the working hard to get more money to improve the quality of their life. in y opinion, young people should think about everything in their life, such as, make important decisions for future.

First, every decision they’ll make even the small one, has some influences to their future life, for example, when the people of middle east made decision to use a lot of water I means that they waste the last sources of water they had, and it’s done before they think about what happened to people later? What children should to without water? They’ve never think about these thinks.so they waste it.

Second, humans are hunting foxes to sells their skins, or they are hunting some kangaroos because bothering humans by eats all crops that they plant, or they are cutting down the trees to make papers and make beautiful sofas. And all these things destroyed almost of forest that animals live there but they have never think about it, it’s not important for them \they just think about a moment that they are living also they just want to be special such as wear a coat that made polar bearskin without any upset about that cute bear that was alive some months ago.

Third, some young people,some kind humans, take care about animals and their natural life and plants to save them and growth them in the flagship places to get survival them. Also government think about it and makes some offices to absorbing more people to make an important decision about everything that will help people in future.

In summaries, most of the young people never think about important things that for their children’s future. I hope so young people beside of their busy life think more about effective decisions that they should will make them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...y to improve the quality of their life. in y opinion, young people should think ab...
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Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
...t made decision to use a lot of water I means that they waste the last sources of wat...
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Line 5, column 319, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'thought'.
Suggestion: thought
... animals live there but they have never think about it, it's not important for t...
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Line 7, column 25, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , some
... months ago. Third, some young people,some kind humans, take care about animals an...
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Line 7, column 176, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e flagship places to get survival them. Also government think about it and makes som...
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Line 7, column 324, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... about everything that will help people in future. In summaries, most of the young peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, third, for example, i mean, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85893416928 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.153465839 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523510971787 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.6369949473 48.9658058833 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.909090909 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0841941034124 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464451991957 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036698107642 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0657826626967 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313685991652 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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