TPO 34
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
There is no shortage of the opinion about the relation between students' education and habit. In my opinion, the development of technology is hindrance for educating young people. I feel this way for two main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, adolescents' will to study is diminished in light of new technologies because they want to spend more time on these things rather than lesson. Therefore, people having no commitment for school tend to pay insufficient attention for learning, which makes it hard to develop their knowledge. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. I had never used phone until I get fifteen, which is the main reason why my grades were high and I received prize from mathematics competition. Afterwards, I bought mobile phone in order to utilize it as appropriate purpose. Unfortunately, the phone started influencing me severely because I had habit of checking social platform without any clear purpose, which causes me to ruin my valuable time. Moreover, I recognized that I stopped willing to study and explore things. As a result, my grade decreased, and I have never carried over award from mathematics competition since that time. For this reason, the influence of unnecessary things affects attitude towards the school and other requisite matters.
Secondly, the wish to employ these technologies and their notification distracts juveniles while they are studying. Thereby, people who lost concentration in light of these things causes them to not understand the topic or expend more time in order to comprehend the subject. For instance, Until the last year, I could not fuss over the learning due to notification from Facebook and I had culminated in consuming my time by chitchatting with friends. Fortunately, I realized that extent of my focusing have increased as soon as I limited the amount of time which I spend for Facebook to thirty minutes. Therefore, my grades were increased as I stopped expending too much time for social website. If I had not lost the habit, I would have ended up dropping my high school. In Drawing from my own experience, ability of people are declined because they cannot concentrate properly due to these things.
In conclusion, the video games, mobile phone and social platforms makes the learning and educating process harder. This is because students cannot fuss over the lesson and they prefer doing nonessential things to studying.
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- TPO 32 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 70
- TPO 36 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement For the successful development of a country it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children five to ten years old than to spend money on universities 47
- TPO 5 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do 76
- People have a lot of opinions about the value of advanced education Which do you think is the most important reason to attend college or university new experiences career preparation increased knowledge Use specific details and examples in your answer 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 612, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'appropriates'?
Suggestion: appropriates
... mobile phone in order to utilize it as appropriate purpose. Unfortunately, the phone start...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15571776156 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88460857062 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540145985401 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7658113397 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.904761905 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5714285714 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121146599808 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0384732062696 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362206312968 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0814884428012 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326734368119 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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