When thinking about issue that educating youngsters is a more tough job today than it was previously for they spend far more time on social mediate, varied individuals will have diverse ideas. Some citizens claim that nowadays the students can acquire a large amount of information which is conducive to their study, so teaching kids today is much easier than it was in the past. However, from where I stand, it is a labyrinthine mission for current teacher to educate children for following reasons.
First and foremost, using cell phone, playing online game and browsing social networking Web sites will definitely keep them from concentrating. The majority of information youngsters obtained from Internet is fragmentary which possess a limited content, and they will feel hard to put their heart in the time-consuming and stamina-needed things after reading the fragmentary passage excessively. As a result, teachers may find it is difficult to attract the attention of students. Take my friend Lisa as an example. Lisa used to be a excellent students and did well in virtually all discipline, however, this was changed after she bought a up to date smart phone. She started to play online games and browse blogs everyday, in this way, her academic performance decrease drastically. Therefore, her teacher could not engross her on class any more for there is something more interesting. Cell phone and other things will take kids' stamina from study and make them abstract in class, which teachers are powerless to cope with such a circumstance.
Furthermore, the competition among society is severer than it was in the past, so teachers are inclined to assign more onerous tasks to make kids fully prepared for the fierce competition in the future, as a result, students are under too much pressure. When they encounter hardship, they will tend to escape the troubles, so the cell phone, online game and social application become a good outlet, and gradually it will be hard for teachers to educate them well.
In a nutshell, not only do these mediates abstract youngsters' attention, but also a good way for them to lessen pressure, therefore, they cannot devote their mind in class. So I strongly endorse that educating children is more difficult today.
- TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO-42 - Independent Writing Task Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 75
- TPO-28 - Integrated Writing Task Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him 81
- TPO 38 Integrated writing 17
- TPO-49 - Integrated Writing Task Like many creatures, humpback whales migrate long distances for feeding and mating purposes. How animals manage to migrate long distances is often puzzling. In the case of humpback whales, we may have found the answer: the 81
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 534, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...end Lisa as an example. Lisa used to be a excellent students and did well in virt...
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Line 3, column 640, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ever, this was changed after she bought a up to date smart phone. She started to ...
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Line 3, column 716, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...d to play online games and browse blogs everyday, in this way, her academic performance ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11320754717 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79370399387 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576819407008 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2130704997 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.466666667 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7333333333 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271589671326 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856726531143 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667968235023 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167736035742 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388813564912 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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