TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

There denying that parents play a significant role in their children lives. Parents can contribute to their children success by spending some time with them. However, if parents are super busy with their daily chores or with their work, they should spend their limited having fun and playing games with their children instead of doing something related to schoolwork. The basis of my views is because playing games and having fun can have a great impact on parents children's relationship and can have great benefits for both children and parents physical and mental health.

Fun has an indispensable effect in parents children's relationships. One of the most important effects is that Fun creates incredible good moments between family members that could last as unforgotten moments in the children's memories. For instance, even though my parents were incredibly busy with their work, they assigned at least an hours every day to spend some time with me. Also, my parents were struggling with two jobs and increasing expenses, they used to take me every day to the park to play and have fun. Thus, this creates lots of memories that last with me forever even though it was limited to few hours per day. If they push it hard to work on something related to school work, I would have nothing fun to related to my family.

In addition, Playing games have significant benefits to both parents and children. Among the most important benefits that we should recognise here are mental and physical benefits. A study conducted at The University Of California indicated that playing physical games like football or soccer ball for at least half an hour a day have incredible benefits to the human body. Parents who encourage their students to participate in a soccer game are more likely have healthier children. Nevertheless, playing soccer relieve stress that has been built up in both parents and children.

Admittedly doing something related to schoolwork is important for the children success. However, Parents who spending the very limited time asking their children to work on their homework or their school assignments can add tremendous stress on the children. In addition, parents should spend their time having fun with their children and leave the school related work to their student teachers.

As a conclusion, we can safely say that, even though children schoolwork should not be neglected by parents, parents should intelligently use their free time up to the maximum. Parents who spend time with their children create greater moments in their children mind and help their children to be physically fit and stress-free.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...with their work, they assigned at least an hours every day to spend some time with...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an hour' or simply 'hours'?
Suggestion: an hour; hours
...with their work, they assigned at least an hours every day to spend some time with me. A...
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Line 3, column 607, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...h me forever even though it was limited to few hours per day. If they push it hard...
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Line 9, column 329, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n to be physically fit and stress-free.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'thus', 'at least', 'for instance', 'in addition']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.266094420601 0.229887763892 116% => OK
Verbs: 0.158798283262 0.158761421928 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0793991416309 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0429184549356 0.046263068375 93% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0751072961373 0.0685040099705 110% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115879828326 0.118717715034 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0557939914163 0.0351676179071 159% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59386375032 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0407725321888 0.0309702414327 132% => OK
Particles: 0.00429184549356 0.00188951952338 227% => OK
Determiners: 0.0622317596567 0.0887237588012 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0257510729614 0.0209618222197 123% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0107296137339 0.0139019557991 77% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2639.0 2387.08602151 111% => OK
No of words: 431.0 408.028673835 106% => OK
Chars per words: 6.12296983759 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.368909512761 0.338922669872 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.299303944316 0.251872472559 119% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190255220418 0.174417080927 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.120649651972 0.112833075102 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59386375032 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443155452436 0.524397521467 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.1845943181 59.2087087015 81% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.55 20.5533526081 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8042235407 48.84282405 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.95 120.699889404 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.55 20.5533526081 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 51.4803944316 45.7405998639 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.58139534884 1.45489161554 109% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409135397675 0.300154397459 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.143178343604 0.103427244359 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0824075156317 0.0752933317313 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.540600500366 0.497263757937 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147158838945 0.151897553556 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156373645246 0.114077575197 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443812853737 0.0781384742642 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.33348573819 0.336927656856 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0941152562576 0.067059652881 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272107162028 0.210909579961 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305439500785 0.0618886996521 49% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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