I disagree with this statement; I believe that the opinions of celebrities are more important to older people than they are for young people for the following reasons.
To begin with, usually, the younger people's models are their parents; they do not watch television when adults do not supervise them. Most of the time, younger people do not understand the difficult issues which usually celebrities or athletes are talking about, therefore they often ask their parents for their opinion or explanations about what they have just herd. The younger people trust more their parents rather than people that they never met in person, and the subjects of the celebrities and athletes talk about are not really something which younger people are interested in. This is one reason why I reckon that celebrities' opinions it is not more important to young people than they are for adults.
The second reason why I believe that celebrities and athletes' opinions are more important for older people is that they are models for most of the adults. All of us have a favorite celebrity or athlete who we follow on TV and admire, for older people is more important the opinion of celebrities because they see them as an example to follow as well as younger people do with their parents. Furthermore, older people do not only pay more attention to celebrities' declarations, but they also imitate them such as in their looks and lifestyles. This is the proof that for many adults what famous people do and think are very important for them.
Finally, younger people are much more interested in cartoons and other educational programs, which usually do to host any celebrities or athletes, older people are more curious and keen to know about their "heroes". These are the reasons why I believe that famous people's opinions have more influence on adults than they have on younger people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, look, really, second, so, therefore, well, i reckon, such as, talking about, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98734177215 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62351506133 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427215189873 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.1344130393 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.272727273 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7272727273 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6363636364 5.45110844103 232% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345033357173 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179690275929 0.076458572812 235% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605081421429 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265099459404 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284115584325 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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