TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

Submitted by Vitek on Thu, 03/22/2018 - 08:49

The events around the world is a very important part of our lives. We live in society and as a result, it is very important to understand different situations that are close to us. Some people think that is important to know about events happening around the world, even though they are unlikely to affect our daily lives; others disagree. In my view, it is important to know what events are going around the world for two important reasons.

The main reason is that you will be able to seize more opportunities and improve your life. We live in the world which changes very fast with different trends. This changes could provide some benefits to people who can get them and use. For example, two years ago my friend Dmitro found out in the newspaper about science conference in Barcelona. This event herded together many scientists and businessmen. The topic of this conference was about artificial intelligence and it development. He understood that event was his opportunity to present his own ideas in that field. He had bought a ticket for a plane and flew to Barcelona. He presented his project and some companies representatives took his phone and contacts. After a few weeks, he got an invitation to work in a very progressive company. As a result, now he has a huge salary and lives in a luxury apartment. As you can see, this event helped him to achieve the better style of life.

Another important reason is that you will have an interesting topic to discuss with your friends or family members. We have a lot of different fascinating things in our world such as improving artificial intelligence, which could lead to improvement of our life by automation of many processes. For instance, last week my friend Roman and I discussed different consequences of developing artificial intelligence. We focus our discussion first on positive impacts of AI (Artificial Intelligence) such as better products and lower prices and bad consequences such as high unemployment rate. As you can see different events in our world could provide good topics for discussion.

In sum, knowing about a different event in our world that even don't influence our lives could be important. This event could be not only used for a discussion but also they can give you some benefits. That's why you should know about different things in the world.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 634, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Suggestion: don't
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Suggestion: That's
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...w about different things in the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8671679198 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7998162191 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511278195489 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9892396177 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9166666667 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.625 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54166666667 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247264264383 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747486177301 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829691076798 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171256968556 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880703209581 0.0645574589148 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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