Due to migrant populations that migrate from different countries, there are working relationships across the globe internationally, so it’s necessary to knowing about different cultures will those relationships. In my opinion, to understand each country’s conditions. It should be referred to the history and culture of that country.
First, every day, in the workplace, in the classroom, on the street, we often see a lot of people who are immigrants, and sometimes included in our staff, when we know the history cultures, we can understand them in a better way. For example, I migrated from Iran to Australia, and I worked at a huge fantastic hospital as an emergency nurse. The manager of the hospital search about all the cultures in his staffs and if they have kind of celebration he orders to decorate the hospital like that, I remember the first of the spring, that is our ‘Eid we called Nowruz, and all the people in Iran be in 13 days’ holiday, and the kids paint the eggs and all the people make a seven dishes we called haft sin, and each one decorates the table with its own tastes. That seven dishes include; apple, vinegar, samanu, grass, angustifolia, sumac, garlic. And in the middle of the table is a red fishbowl, they surround the flowers of tulips and hyacinths as a fragrant scent of spring. And he called me you are off today and tomorrow we have big surprise for you and all Iranian employees, and when I came to work I saw that he makes the haft sin middle of the entrance hall of hospital and some Iranian musicians played the music in entrance door of hospital. And that was incredible time I’ve ever had. He made a fabulous morning for us because of he searched some information about all culture to show that he cares about us, all the staffs like him as great boss.
Second, to establish personal relationships, the couple should know about their different cultures, it’s necessary to know more about each other. For example, my boyfriend from Australia and I’m from Iran, and at first was very hard to accept all situations we have but after some weeks we search about our cultures and we get known each other better than before, also when we get argue he said that it’s because of our differences, we should use to it. and now after 10 years we have 2 twin girls without any problems.
In conclusion, all the people should get information about all the culture’s it doesn’t any effect on their own life, but it depends on their situations they will make other happy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...he street, we often see a lot of people who are immigrants, and sometimes included in o...
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Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'decorating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'order' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: decorating
...they have kind of celebration he orders to decorate the hospital like that, I remember the ...
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Line 3, column 1265, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the music in entrance door of hospital. And that was incredible time I've ever...
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Line 3, column 1348, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because he' instead.
Suggestion: because he
... had. He made a fabulous morning for us because of he searched some information about all cul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79185520362 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74751190838 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515837104072 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 12.0 1.86738351254 643% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 105.187113702 48.9658058833 215% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 141.2 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4666666667 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0707097640535 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0258802444106 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293118037628 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0535593822712 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0126172271542 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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