Nowadays, we are living in very dynamic world. Everyday, we can hear about new events and social activities in many countries all over the world. Some people are so busy we their daily activities and they believe it is not important at all to know about these events. While other might disagree. However, when it comes to me I believe that it is very important to follow of these actions for to important reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.
To begin with, knowing about events that happening around us is very helpful to keep us up to date. we can hear about different critical events happening around us. When we watch these events at the television we can understand the world in different perspective. For example, last five year, we heard about political revolution at Egypt. Many speakers in different channels provided us with many news. In fact, we knew from these channels how the Egyptian government treated people over there. In addition, many counties around the middle east got involved with Egypt solve this issue. As a result, many people took the right to vote to select new present and many young people started new position in the new government. On the other hand, if we did not follow these news over the social media and television, we could not get up to date and learn from other culture. As you can see, we can participate and understand the world around us when we follow the news of different counties.
In addition, following the events help us to gain new experience. Recently, we can find many new advanced technology available all over the world. Many people try to imitate the other culture when they discover something new that can help the humanity. For instance, last year, I heard about new medical technology discovered in France to cure many young children who are suffering from cardiac problems. So, my country send many scientists to learn about this invention. In fact, I feel that our scientists when they back to our home town will help many patients. In addition, many doctors can apply this in the future and they can improve the medical level. On the other hand, people who could not catch the most up dates new, they could not gain any thing new and they could not improve their medical status. This experience taught me that we can learn new experience that can help the whole society through following all the news.
In sum, I believe that we have hardly stick to all the news in different fields all over the world. This is because we can up date ourselves and because we can gain new experience. I strongly encourage all people even adults or young people to follow all the news through the internet, and the social media.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[2]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
...s, we are living in very dynamic world. Everyday, we can hear about new events and socia...
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Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tant at all to know about these events. While other might disagree. However, when it ...
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Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
... is very helpful to keep us up to date. we can hear about different critical event...
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Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nt critical events happening around us. When we watch these events at the television...
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Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
... in different channels provided us with many news. In fact, we knew from these chann...
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Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
... in different channels provided us with many news. In fact, we knew from these channels h...
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Line 3, column 764, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
...On the other hand, if we did not follow these news over the social media and television, w...
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Line 5, column 750, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
... most up dates new, they could not gain any thing new and they could not improve their me...
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Line 5, column 925, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the whole society through following all the news. In sum, I believe that we h...
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Line 7, column 39, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'stuck'.
Suggestion: stuck
... In sum, I believe that we have hardly stick to all the news in different fields all...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71881606765 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4017918271 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429175475687 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2357831855 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6666666667 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5185185185 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141389197288 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508635615193 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452389560888 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101623344239 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516912990156 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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