TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

Since the dawn of civilization, people have been concerned about whether exchanging news and information could be a beneficial task to do or not. The advent of technology has brought people in touch more than before; hence, as a consequence, this controversy has culminated. In this regard, there is a pervasive debate amongst people that it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if they do not have any effect on our daily life. Personally speaking, I am in favor of this statement. I assert my viewpoint for two reasons and will illustrate them in the following.
The first aspect to be mentioned is that what has happened on the other side of the world, may one they happen in our own country; therefore, in order to be ready to face that event, it is better to be aware of it. To be more clear, by observation of an event that has occurred in another country and by monitoring how those people and the associated government manage that event, we can gain a precious experience for future uses; hence, supposing the same event happened to our country, we would be prepared for that and we would be able to conquer it. To convey my notion, take an earthquake as an example, imagine an earthquake happened in another country, we could gain experiences of how to control an emergency situation by observing the behavior of that country's government and local people precisely.
Apart from the point discussed above let assess this remark from the standpoint of ethics. Humans are connecting together and we all are responsible for each other; thus, we should be aware of other people's status all over the world in case if something bad happened to them, we should be aware of that in order to help them. To put this in a more vivid picture, again take the earthquake as an example. suppose an earthquake happened in a specific place and other people in the world were aware of that, people would go to help the inhabitants of that place or would send equipment for them. On the other hand, if people were not aware of the situation, it would be so hard for the local people to conquer the catastrophe by themselves.
All in all, according to the aforementioned points and examples, I cling to the viewpoint that it is important to be aware of the events happening in our world owing to the fact that acquiring experience and helping other people in the case of emergency are striking important. However, there is an opposing viewpoint that it is not important to get involved with events that do not influence our daily lives but from the standpoint of moral and intellect, I am willing to conclude that it is important to be aware of events happening all over the world.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 405, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Suppose
...gain take the earthquake as an example. suppose an earthquake happened in a specific pl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, apart from, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6589958159 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68959966528 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453974895397 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.0936820703 48.9658058833 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.466666667 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8666666667 20.6045352989 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163139390457 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658115416842 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087395284224 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124753443597 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776057814868 0.0645574589148 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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