TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The history courses always have been important fields of study, especially for university students. I am of the conviction that students should not be forced to study history at university. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following passage.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that providing throughout history courses for universities is not financially beneficial. It is axiomatic that when students are not interested in a specific subject, they do not learn anything from that. Also, since universities should pay money to hire new history teachers, especially such universities that do not relate to the historical sciences, lots of expenses emerge, while no significant outcome is obtained. For example, in my undergraduate program, our university required us to pass history classes. Consequently, unless there was no history teacher in our university, they hired three teachers for that purpose. On the other hand, my friend's academy school, which was not as famous as ours, invested this money to increase grants for research projects. The result was interesting, my friend university preceded our university's ranking. This shows that investing in history classes not only is not useful but contributes to financial losses.
Another noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that studying history is a waste of time for not a history major student. In fact, students can take some extracurricular classes and obtain some valuable skills instead of learning somethings which might never be helpful for them. My own experience is compelling evidence of this concept. In our university, we can take history classes as elective courses. I preferred to take a software class instead of a history class. As a result, I learned how to work with software which was related to my background. After I graduated, I could find a very suitable job because of this skill. I would not have gotten that job if I had picked the history class instead of that software workshop. This shows that students can spend their time on more crucial matters than history to help them in their future careers.
To put it in briefly, all enumerate reasons lead us to the conclusion that university students should not be forced to pass the history courses because not only it would be economically useless, but also is a waste of time for students who can learn a useful skill in the same time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
...t supporting this opinion is that these days government pass some strict law on taxe...
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Line 3, column 711, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'taxes'' or 'tax's', 'taxis's'?
Suggestion: taxes'; tax's; taxis's
... Iran president declared that 'the taxes income have become greater than even Ir...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, briefly, but, consequently, first, if, so, for example, i feel, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15864022663 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86893742499 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56940509915 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0345799141 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.166666667 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6111111111 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0886178560307 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0322100130571 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331262237982 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0773826313085 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390018098094 0.0645574589148 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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