In the modern era, governmental decisions are regarded as crucial factors contributing to the various aspects of people's lives. One of the heated debates in this realm is associated with the areas that the government should spend its money. Many people adhere to the view that the budget should be spent on art, while others believe it will be more influential if it is spent on sports. Ego, when it comes to my stance, by weighing up the pros and cons, I firmly hold that investing in sports is a more beneficial choice. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that supporting athletics would encourage people in exercising and improves public health. The proliferation of investments in the sports industry made people step into the path of being professional players. Although some of them will not achieve this goal, the roots of practicing and exercising will be prominent in society. My own experience is a compelling example of this. About ten years ago, a fashion in my country was started to attract young and talented children for the academics of our local football clubs. As a result, scores of students, including my friends and me, started practicing football to become a famous athlete in the future. We did not accomplish to be professionals; however, we already play football every weekend together, and this habit helped us to stay fit.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that it can turn sports into a thriving industry and attract investors from all over the world to our country. Watching sports has been one of the major entertainments of people for decades. Consequently, it has absorbed the attention of giant companies to spend their dollars voraciously in this industry. Take the premier league of England as an example. We can see the clash of the different incorporations overtaking the sponsorships of the great teams. Also, the national television benefits from selling the rights of broadcasting exhibitions to other countries. Thus, it helps a lot in the development of the country.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that investing in athletics is more beneficial than spending the budget on arts. This is because it increases the healthy behaviors among society, and draws the attention of investors to the country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 177, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...The proliferation of investments in the sports industry made people step into the path...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, thus, while, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2027.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09296482412 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93722891587 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577889447236 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.7439443758 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5238095238 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9523809524 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95238095238 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0971749576663 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0254429242686 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374822175098 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0571727650582 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281919534761 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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