It is hard to deny that arts are treasures of national cultures and the cornerstone of human artistic civilization, and such a fact leads impressionable people to generate the opinion that governments should give priority to the arts instead of athletes. However, such a statement suffers from both logical and factual fallacies, and we should examine it meticulously. As far as feasibility, finance and efficiency are concerned, I firmly believe that governments should divert their investment to athletics.
First and foremost, athletics are more feasible than arts in promoting national quality, as only if the sports are paid attention by nation and citizens，the country would develop better with their strong, healthy people. Meanwhile, if the government would like to cultivate athletics such as sportsmen from Olympic teams, the influence of a gold medalist is enormous. Not to mention that sportsmanship could be a good mentor for teenagers telling them while facing difficulties to overcome them with the following virtues: diligence, perseverance and strong belief.
Furthermore, the fact that compared with art exhibitions, sports competitions generally appeal to a broader audience and attract more social attention, leading to more financial return indicates that governments should allocate funds to athletics. Take the case of the Olympics, which symbolizes freedom and equality, can get significant publicity. Hence, companies all over the world are willing to pay millions of sponsorships to publicize their products by providing athletes with sportswear and the most advanced sports equipment. Even after the Olympics, it is very likely to bring more economic benefit to these companies in the future. Had it not been for the emphasis on athletics, allowing governments to organize a great sporting event, like the Olympics, the organizers and companies would miss the chance to make such remarkable economic results.
Nevertheless, a voice arises that investment in arts could bring long-term impact, is the most efficient way to improve the quality of national cultural and spiritual lives. Ironically, it will also take a long time to show results of reflection from artistic investments. People may wonder if the money, as well as the time, would be worth to spend on arts. In contract, compared to arts, the effect of sports activities would be apparent in a relatively short period. The athletics fund of the government could encourage people to engage in sports activities, making them physically strong first because a healthy body is a basis for people to carry out all activities. Citizens input themselves better into study and work, create more economic value, and improve the nation’s overall fighting capacity with a healthy body. Therefore, supporting athletics is the proper solution to efficiency in national quality enhance.
In a nutshell, I maintain that athletics require more budge from governments. Admittedly, as my favourite quote from Penelope Fitzgerald goes, it is interesting to note that everyone has a different take on the world, a different opinion, and given the same inputs have completely different outputs, and some people may oppose me. However, I believe they will compromise after being exposed to my article.
- TOEFL T P O 42 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Television advertising directed toward young children aged two to five should not be allowed Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 81
- Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information Others think access to much information creates problems Which view do you agree with Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 88
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement If people have the opportunity to get a secure job they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 90
- Because modern life is very complex it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize 90
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, while, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2771.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46548323471 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9763228649 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560157790927 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 871.2 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5526787135 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.952380952 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169300967057 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461468287005 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037461414552 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878324239846 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355275423587 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 86.8835125448 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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