TPO10
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them
Some families believe that playing computer games is a waste of time and make children socially detached, on the other extreme of the rope, others inclined toward the opinion that, with the galloping rate of technology, no one can turn a blind eye to the numerous effects of computer games on children’s lives. Actually, they think playing computer games can improve children's intelligence and is not waste of time. Although both sides take their own positions, I deeply believe that the latter group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will explain the most outstanding my reasons.
First and foremost, playing games especially computer games can improve children's intelligence, hardworking, and creativity. Nowadays, most of the multiple players online computer games have been designed according to educational standards in order to attract children and educate them various skills such as team working and trying to understand and solve difficult problems and experience unprecedented challenges. For instance, EA Sports Company produces different games that challenge the children's brain. During these games, children should find the most innovative way to go outside of the dark castle to achieve higher scores. Therefore, playing computer games not only is not waste of time, but also, is one of the best methods that can improve the children's creativity, strong their brain, and develop their abilities.
Second, today with the galloping rate of people, we see an unbelievable growth rate of crime and addiction between teenagers, hence all families should manage their children's leisure periods and activities and prevent them to be attracted to illegal and criminal groups which active outside of the home and school. Computer games can play an important and pivotal role in preventing children to go out of the home and make a dangerous relation with these various criminal groups. Computer games with the attractive and modern designs, can amuse children in their free time. This lovely amusement does not allow children to think about other dangerous activities and groups which maybe attract them and immature teenagers.
Last but not least, computer games as an inherent part of children’s daily life can have positive, therapeutic effects on them and amuse and help them have great times and release their emotion and energy in a safe condition which does not threat them any danger. As a tangible example, playing football may injure children and create some health problem such as fracture of the bones of the hand and feet.
To put everything in a nutshell and broad look over the main points and discussions reveals the fact that playing computer games can help children develop their skills and not to attract to criminal activity outside of home and schools. However, Families should allow children to release and show their emotions and extra energies by playing various and amusement games.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 13.8261648746 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2479.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30835117773 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64435495112 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522483940043 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.5219279458 48.9658058833 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.823529412 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4705882353 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450325081093 0.236089414692 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153713072642 0.076458572812 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0909436794688 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265521596055 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420552951983 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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