People can become a successful person if they work hard to alter their goals. Some of them do not believe in luck to get success. However, in my opinion, I believe that luck play some part in our life to reach the top position. I hold this opinion for two points.
First of all, working hard does not guarantee you to become successfull. You must include some luck in that way. For example, I have some friend who always study one week before the exam. Also, he make summary for the subject test and sometimes he stay late at the college library. However, I have another friend who is very smart student. He only study one day before test and mostly he does not study at all. Later on, after the test result is given to the students, my friend who prepared more, get lower score than the other one. I believe my friend who get lower score does not have luck as my friend who manage get better score.
Second, luck can somehow turn you to choose the right decision. For instance, this is happened for me in my high school. For instance, in one day, my teacher annouced that the next day there will be mid-term test. I got panic since they will not be enough time for me to master all the test materials. However, luck directs me to focus on one specific topic while I just read the summary of other topics. In the next morning, I knew that I was the lucky person in the world. Most of the question test ask about the topic that I learned in the last night.
In conclusion, I assure that if you want to become successful person, you cannot just rely on your work, but it must include luck too. Those two things will support each others to get your dream.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...tudy one week before the exam. Also, he make summary for the subject test and someti...
^^^^
Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'stays'.
Suggestion: stays
...y for the subject test and sometimes he stay late at the college library. However, I...
^^^^
Line 3, column 349, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'studies'.
Suggestion: studies
...iend who is very smart student. He only study one day before test and mostly he does ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.30990415335 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.06902991029 2.67179642975 77% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536741214058 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.6529654906 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.2380952381 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9047619048 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116710601134 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405276127872 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537111195285 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0918589774845 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550401718419 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 11.7677419355 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 58.1214874552 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.13 10.9000537634 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.55 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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